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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2009-05-27 12:48 PM

The things I knew but had denied:
which lovers loved me
which ones lied
a lone footprint upon the beach
was there because the sun had dried
the logic of conclusions
two
I had quite simply lost my shoe
to the tug of one strong wave
but yes, it's true, that I had prayed
when I felt the water spray
pellets fierce upon my back
as I'd turned to walk away
from things I knew
but had denied.

I said nothing to the sun
as I waved the moon away
trespassing through the grasses of
a future island swooned
the sway
coddling the eggs of one
crane--he felt the need to stay--
in denial of betrayed
of his woman gone and eggs

now crushed beneath my clumsiness
my tears competed with the sea

for salt

for dreams

for what I'd done --

acknowledgement

of wars I'd waged

without a single gauntlet thrown

in ignorance of my own rage

weary of the beach, I ached

for stone beneath my feet

no prints

no evidence to mark the day,

but sand between my toes.

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

1 posted 2009-05-27 07:29 AM

I think there are many things we know, but deny. I enjoyed reading this.

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

2 posted 2009-05-27 11:53 AM

Loved the poem, very deep, I understand where you are coming from.

and your new picture is fantastic!

~ARH

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2009-05-27 12:17 PM

You paint your canvas with imagery surreal--as if you breathed it right out of the soul and exhaled it directly into your brush...your words live as if to convey all of life's glory & pain in a single stroke. Again, you have pleasurably exceeded expectations (and I, for one, am grateful.)

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2009-05-27 01:25 PM

"which lovers loved me
which ones lied"

*nodding* lived that..

"in ignorance of my own rage"

oh yes...and ignorance is only bliss for a little while.

"weary of the beach, I ached
for stone beneath my feet"

stability.

it's all part of why I love you so. You don't have to understand it. Just accept.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

5 posted 2009-05-27 03:56 PM

This read so well, it kept me on the edge, and I liked it.
Oh those foolish lovers that lied, they don't know what they missed.

Wonderful,
Tracey.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2009-05-27 08:34 PM

Ya'll are just beautiful!

I wanted to say thank you before I waddle off to bed--I broke my dietary rules and now I feel like I'm having a cow.

OH. I did have a cow. (Great burger, it was too, but hardly worth all this swelling.)

Well, it might have been the tequila and whatever else is in a Red Turtle.

Or maybe the salsa and tortilla chips? *wince*

I'll stop.

And I'm chuckling, a bit. I find inspiration in weird ways. Y'see, we had sand delivered to our home, and now EVERYBODY has sand between their toes. And that's how it starts.

I write backwards.

<--not feeling up to that either.

Love and hugs to you all. I'm gonna go wash my feet. AGAIN. *smoochies*

Osprey
Member

since 2009-04-12

Posts 249

7 posted 2009-05-28 10:58 AM

I really fell into this poem, being a denial merchant too. But, hey, that's just covering up the truth with sand. When that ol' soul-searching wind blows, the truth is always uncovered. At times, I'm not too keen on the truth, prefering the stability of stone to the shifting of sand. So, I step back onto the stone, but there's always a little sand between my toes to remind me.
Sorry, I'm blethering.
It's always a pleasure to read your poetry, it gets more ticks than Einstein's homework.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

8 posted 2009-05-28 11:38 AM

ms serene..
you undress dirty rocks so sexy..then leave them shimmering wet so your reflection shows in their eyes..as usual a pleasure to watch you dance

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2009-05-28 10:53 PM

I so understand your thoughts here for so many reasons. Lovely new picture. Well done as usual.
Ida

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

10 posted 2009-05-29 01:40 AM

You always hit me hard with your writes because they are so well written. I enjoy all that you pen.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2009-05-31 07:31 AM

it always amazes me

when the sun comes up!

thank you

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

12 posted 2009-05-31 03:06 PM

quote:
weary of the beach, I ached

for stone beneath my feet

no prints

no evidence to mark the day,

but sand between my toes.

Me to my husband: "stop calling me I am busy ..." yes busy getting goosebumps over the intensity of your poem!

Dear Karen, your backwards creation is superb.

love,
Margherita

Bloodline
Member

since 2009-05-23

Posts 236
Oklahoma

13 posted 2009-05-31 03:11 PM

A line by line voyage
in calm and rough seas
upon the heart, sweetly
and alluring penned,

Bloodline

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