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My first poem submission.
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My first poem submission. |
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Lone_Wolf84 Junior Member
since 2009-05-26
Posts 21 |
I should have rated first, first try of it to see what real poets would think of it. So I was anxious. When we see reality what are we reaching after Are we constantly pushing it ahead so it somehow happens after Living for tommorrow becouse today is to hard but tommorow a new day arises and a new bard will sing But what happens when the trumpet dies out for good Will the end be good Or will the echoes die out echoes never stay, the trumpet lives but people want it to rott Forgeting the past and living for tomorrow. Reverse it and find your balance punish your demons with your own lance. Aim for the heart. If the lance doesn't work throw a dart. rollercoaster is we want to live for. finding the balance to grey And then it starts again. |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
Welcome to PiP. I think you're really going to enjoy posting and reading here - lot's of friendly people! Great first poem, look forward to reading more! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hello, Lone Wolf! Welcome to our "Family of Friends"! Some very interesting philosophical points to ponder in your debuting poem! Most people see only the extremes of either white or black ~ but you are able to see the grey wherein balance lies!  Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel  |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I didn't see a reply options for comments, but did see you were looking for opinions. Interesting philosophical ponderings. Spelling check may help on some words, (bard) and punctuation is random. Welcome to PIP, The Blue addiction. Look forward to seeing more of your work. Tracey The answer is always NO, Until the question is asked. |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Beginnings are what every breath is all about, your sighs are worth reading, write on, Bloodline |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Welcome to Pip, Lone_Wolf. Look forward to reading more of your poems. |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
Interestng bits of homely philosophy spoilt by a lack of attention to detail as pointed out by WTBAKELAR, Welcome to Pip |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions; You pursue a wonderful muse here, the feeling of falling through the clouds echoed. A bit stumbly for the reader in the presentation, but good stock for sure! More please  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Welcome to the bluezoo...it was cool to see "bard" used, seems it is seldom recognized...as for the poem, you will never please everyone.....so enjoy your own views and just relax and share with us |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Wolf. I've been remiss in welcoming our newest poets, so please excuse the bump, but I did want to send you a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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