Open Poetry #44 |
As a Cool Wind |
Marcia MT Junior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 36California USA |
Too old am I for unrequited heart-felt promises not kept as piercing as red-hot daggers scaring over scars letters strewn about the back porch a resemblance to falling leaves of autumn the air oppressive with early summer heat a smothering blanket forcing me against my will to keep on breathing demanding breath after breath Billie Holiday coming through the speakers sings my song eyes scanning unwilling the letters page after page they tell the story of years of hope crushed trust extinguished like a burned down candle’s flame dying a slow death agonizing over what might have been the truth comes like a cool refreshing wind followed by acceptance love is for the young let them have it, I need it no more far too jaded am I. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well written. With the cool wind of time and acceptance at one's back...it's easier to to move forward. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
very powerful read ... I can relate to this sentiment and nod with a smile Rex |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Marcia MT, This is fairly well done. I'd suggest breaking it up into strophes. That would make it easier to grasp. Love Bobby |
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Marcia MT Junior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 36California USA |
I appreciate your critique Bobby but unfortunately it's too late now. Peace, Marcia |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Marcia, I sure understand how you feel. I too think "Love Is For The Young". I think I have given up on love. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, wow... first line to last... I love it! *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh my, it's such a good day for poetry. I believe this is the first I've read from you, and now you're tagged. Much enjoyed, Marcia. |
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