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Marcia MT
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0 posted 2009-05-17 05:20 PM



Too old am I for unrequited
heart-felt promises not kept
as piercing as red-hot daggers
scaring over scars
letters strewn about
the back porch
a resemblance to
falling leaves of autumn
the air oppressive
with early summer heat
a smothering blanket
forcing me against my will
to keep on breathing
demanding breath after breath
Billie Holiday coming through
the speakers sings my song
eyes scanning unwilling
the letters page after page
they tell the story of
years of hope crushed
trust extinguished like a
burned down candle’s flame
dying a slow death
agonizing over what
might have been
the truth comes like
a cool refreshing wind
followed by acceptance
love is for the young
let them have it,
I need it no more
far too jaded am I.


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1 posted 2009-05-17 07:33 PM


Well written.
With the cool wind of time and acceptance at one's back...it's easier to to move forward.

Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2009-05-17 09:12 PM


very powerful read ... I can relate to this sentiment and nod with a smile

Rex

Robert E. Jordan
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3 posted 2009-05-17 10:14 PM


Yo dear Marcia MT,

This is fairly well done.  I'd suggest breaking it up into strophes.  That would make it easier to grasp.

Love Bobby

Marcia MT
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4 posted 2009-05-17 10:28 PM


I appreciate your critique Bobby but unfortunately it's too late now.
Peace,
Marcia


Oklahoma Rose
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5 posted 2009-05-18 12:09 PM


Marcia, I sure understand how you feel. I too think "Love Is For The Young". I think I have given up on love.
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6 posted 2009-05-19 12:14 PM


Oh, wow... first line to last... I love it! *S*
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7 posted 2009-05-19 04:27 PM


Oh my, it's such a good day for poetry.

I believe this is the first I've read from you, and now you're tagged.

Much enjoyed, Marcia.

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