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The Storm in Edward’s Lullaby
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The Storm in Edward’s Lullaby |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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The Storm in Edward’s Lullaby I saw them in the darkness they hung still just for a moment then continued chasing each other streaming down the window like tears my bones ache me to the marrow it was if a wind went right through me outside sounded like a piano lullaby fingers touching keys up and down I reached to touch the music myself trying to retrace a different moment the prints you had left on my skin your hands in gentle liquid patter tapping the soft rhythm of my heart tenderly you have become my storm lyrical river drizzling from the clouds "I'm so hard to handle |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"they hung still just for a moment then continued chasing each other streaming down the window like tears" love this description... I often watch raindrops chasing each other until they fall into a shared path...wondering why or how that is. (I am probably interpreting this beautiful poem differently than what is meant) M |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
yes M the rain drops |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Okay. I needed to type out my calisthenics before I came to this--I knew, I knew, just by the title it was going to be lush and beautiful... If a raindrop's dribble down a pane of glass has music, drama, and theatrics, then this is the lyric. mmmmmmmmmm.....sigh yer sexy I wish I were gay  (I gave it the old college try, though) *laughing* |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
beautiful! Your words give that emotion such justice. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
outside sounded like a piano lullaby fingers touching keys up and down I reached to touch the music myself trying to retrace a different moment the prints you had left on my skin It simply doesn't get better than this... Gorgeous!!! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
You always leave me without breath. Beauty in all of your words, and here I thought I knew them all so well. |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Well done...I love the rain! Regards. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
helen - have you ever listened to the rain dancing on a tin roof during an early spring morning... Gentle, as your writing... BC |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ahh so! Wonderous you are, my friend...loved it. j. |
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