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leeler12
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since 2009-04-29
Posts 15
Manchester, New Hampshire

0 posted 2009-05-10 09:53 AM


They say the heart is like the ocean
With violent storms that lurk within,
Where one can suffocate by waters
And wait for death to set in.

The ocean appeals to many
Calling with its soothing song,
With its peaceful outward appearance
Souls flock to its joyful throng.

But take one step into the water
And know the oceans real intent,
As rapid scenes flash before your eyes
Of how your life was spent.

Beneath the crystal water
Rages a violent, viscious tide,
Which turns and thrashes incessantly
A storm that wont subside.

The current grabs a hold of you
And starts to drag you down,
You then are faced with a choice
Will you live, or will you drown?

You never cry for help
So noone ever knows your need,
As you struggle to fight alone
The ocean pulls at a faster speed.

It pulls you further and further
You're heart filled with despair,
You try your best to stay a float
Get another breath of air.

However you start growing weak
You can't it handle anymore,
As you decide to give up the fight
You slowly sink to the ocean floor.

They say the heart is like the ocean
With violent storms that lurk within,
Where one can suffocate by waters
For you death has now set in.

You gave it up so quickly
Life hadn't yet begun to start,
But the storm was just too much for you
The storm inside your heart.


~For AAron Miller 5/10/86 to 9/15/03

"you can't gain anything , until you lose something"

© Copyright 2009 Ashlee - All Rights Reserved
rad802
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since 2008-04-19
Posts 279
KY U.S.A.
1 posted 2009-05-10 04:44 PM


Nice write.
Thanks

no-one

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

2 posted 2009-05-10 09:16 PM


"You never cry for help
So noone ever knows your need,
As you struggle to fight alone
The ocean pulls at a faster speed"

...this is such a haunting stanza...and yet, so thought provoking  welcome to PiP

leeler12
Junior Member
since 2009-04-29
Posts 15
Manchester, New Hampshire
3 posted 2009-05-11 01:34 PM


Thank you both for the comments =) i'm glad you enjoyed it! As for the haunting stanza, i like to try to make people ponder things after they read my poetry. It doesn't always work out that way but i'm glad this one stuck =).

"you can't gain anything , until you lose something"

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