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Every Second We're Apart
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Every Second We're Apart |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Every Second We're Apart I wanted to tell you that I miss you baby. My hearts revealing feelings, driving me crazy over you, its true, though we're apart we'll never be through, so get back to me baby as fast as you can, come to me baby and retake my hand. Get back to me baby as fast as you can, get back to me baby its breaking my heart every second we're apart. JamesLee 08May 2009 |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo James, Very nice writing. Bobby |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi James, lovely write and good rythm of the poem. yann |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
James - Evidently you are missing someone a lot. I love the direct impact this makes with an economy of extra sentiment so like an arrow it goes straight to its target and hits the bullseye. Enjoyed. Namyh |
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Spuddette Member
since 2008-07-03
Posts 112England |
Ahh. youre a sweet guy. I imagined receiving this in a txt message and i thought it was just perfect. bless ya. Hope baby comes back to ya soon. xx |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Robert, 2islander2, Namyh and Spuddette for the wonderful responses...James |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
dripping with "sweet sorrow"...you paint a lovely picture of that separation felt in parting |
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