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(I am) the Sun
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(I am) the Sun |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England 
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I am the warmth that nurtures all growing things, I am the blaze that consumes them, I am the flicker of rebirth, I am the sun. I am the heat within a lover's loins, I am the fury within a warrior's heart, I am both the glint of steel and the soft hue of candles, I am the sun. I am the firmament of creation, I am the pyre of death, I am, for by my light do you know the name of shadow, I am the sun. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Suncleaver, This is fairly well done. Replacing all of those commas after all the complete sentences that make-up your lines would make this grammatically correct. Bobby |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very nice, dear Luke! You express the dualism of this our Earth level very well. Enjoyed. Love, Margherita  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Terrific self-expose, Apollo! Shine on! Linda  |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
The sun, the moon the stars, love, everything and more....yes you are...and gifted! ~Warm Love ~ARH |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Very well written. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
An enjoyable read. God bless, Rae |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Sun, this is beautifullly expressed and a pure moment of delight..Thanks for the poem. best wishes yann |
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