Open Poetry #44 |
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Thistles (revised from Open #6) |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana ![]() |
![]() A child searched for the perfect gift Soft cream and lavender appealed Ignoring pain from the stickers She picked some thistles from the field Sucking the blood from pricked fingers She soon gathered a huge bouquet And proudly delivered her gift With her wish – “Happy Mother’s Day!” She thought her present beautiful But to her dismay and surprise The recipient was incensed – The flowers were thrown out and despised “So that’s how you feel!” was the shout “You’re giving me these thorny weeds This garbage you’ve just dumped on me Is the last thing anyone needs!” No one bothered to consider That the gift was more than the flowers The child felt her love rejected And she cried for hours upon hours She grew up, as little girls do And vowed that she would be real tough And never let on how it hurt Knowing her love was not enough But lonely’s lousy companion She allowed herself to pretend Someone would see she had value And solitude would at last end She gave her heart to a good man Hoping he’d heal the hurt of years But he perceived no beauty in Thistles, well-watered with her tears So she’s again left wondering What’s reason for being on earth When all she is and can offer Is still completely lacking worth |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Suthern, it is beautiful and innocence of a child is the real gift to parents, your poem is awesome and superb and interesting; have a nice day yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
(((((((Ruth)))))) this is incredibly heartwrenching and if this has happened to you, I can't begin to imagine how this really made you feel. Besides, in my eyes, thistles are beautiful. This poem is masterfully written! It's not others that establish our worth, remember! You are a precious diamond, you sparkle beautifully on YOUR OWN. Love and hugs. Margherita ![]() ps thistles brought back a memory from a school excursion when in a hostel in the Swiss Alps we put thistles into the boys' beds and then like devils enjoyed their screams .... ![]() |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
suthern.... Heart wrenching and well done. Some people never realize how sensitive children are. Regards. |
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Kaoru![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Geeeeeeesh, that really hurt...it stung. Beautifully written, but ouch. |
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Windhover Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 179UK |
Beautifully crafted, Milady, and an explicit cautionary tale that we should always engage brain before opening mouth. D. |
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Marsha![]()
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved one, Just sometimes I wonder why I continue to write and then I read something you’ve written and realize that I want so much to write even half as well as you do. This was crafted with care, and just as it was crafted it speaks with authenticity. (Darling one I am getting to be an expert on authenticity, it is a Philosophers touchstone) Not that I’m a qualified Philosopher, I haven’t got the beard or the pipe, but .. anyway I digress, this is truly beautiful, as you are beloved one. Some people shine with an inner light, and YOUR inner light shines brightly always. Love your writing lady, YOU ROCK Forget you NEVER X x x x x x Mushy X x x x x Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yann, Margherita, Rex, Kaoru and Windhove: Thank you so much for your wonderful responses... I appreciate each and every one of you so very much!!! Marsha: I love you to bits, sweet lady... and thank you sincerely... even if you are a fraud saying you want to write half as well as me when you already leave me in your dust. *G* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Soemtimes those harsh and uncaring words have a lasting impact, and that is the worst kind of scar to bare. You did good suthern gal. I want to believe that she placed those thistles in a vase, and that they are a unique and beautiful bouquet when arranged in the soft light. That's what I think! ![]() |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smiling wide* touching the screen and have I got a story for you! I might make ya poke me to tell it tho. ![]() You are so beautiful. ![]() |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Dear Suthern, That’s too bad. We don’t have thistles in the city, but we can still feel rejection. Love Bobby |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is so sad. I think thistles are beautiful in their own way, especially If given by a child. This is a story all parents should read. Ida |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i have read this many times and it pulls at my heart each time |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I have often seen the beauty in thistles. They were just given to the wrong person. Not worthless at all! love ya, latearrival |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Being one of the 'odd ones' I happen to like thistles! Birds need them as a food source, and they are an inherently beautiful color of purple in all their protective thorniness. That any mother would reject a treasure from the heart of her child is incredibly sad. MHO, it's the rejecting mother who was the true thorn in this story. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
To reject anything a child gives is a "sin" but how like life to place the "shame" on the child. Most touching and sad write. Helen |
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WTBAKELAR![]()
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I taught my little boy to pick every dandylion in our yard he could find, and give them to his mommy because she loves them, She always responds with a thankyou and he gets a kiss. He hasn't figured out yet that he is weeding the yard for me. Funny how we can teach the young. Tracey. |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Blues, Bobby, Ida, 1slick_lady, late, MS and Honeybunch: Your wonderful responses truly touch my heart. Thank you so much for reading and for leaving such kind remarks. *S* serenity: gal, you know I want to hear that story! *S* Thank you! *S* Tracey: LOL @ your little weed remover... and a big hug to your wife for loving his every offering. *S* I actually DO love dandelions... they turn into "wish flowers". *S* Thank you! *S* |
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