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AlluraD
Junior Member

since 2009-05-06

Posts 28
Florida

0 posted 2009-05-07 12:23 PM

I don't want to spill my guts
across another virgin page,
spattered, scarlet
Rorschach blots to glean
evaluation,
examination,
judgment.

I don't want to leak and drain
what little I have left
from shallow pools
of shadowed ache,
from veins of thought
unsung,
unstrung
through fingers
manic wading.

I don't want to turn me
inside out, exposing
sacred altars kept
to harsher sight
more brittle light,
prefer the night-
its silent voice caressing.

I don't want to hear or speak
those thorn-dipped words
much better left unsaid,
unheard,
a silent bird
caught
in the boughs of mourning.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2009-05-07 12:31 PM

This wish for silence inspired you beautifully. Especially loved the last stanza. Silence holds enchanting tunes.

Love,
Margherita

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2009-05-07 12:57 PM

unheard,
a silent bird
caught
in the boughs of mourning.

I liked the entire poem very much... but these lines are just gorgeous. *S* Welcome to Passions! *S*

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2009-05-07 08:39 PM

Yes

Osprey
Member

since 2009-04-12

Posts 249

4 posted 2009-05-08 05:20 AM

Not sure whether this is exasperation at passionless critique, or just a glorious paradox.
Whatever, it's top drawer in my book. Keep spilling your guts, there's nothing more cathartic.

Raindance
Member

since 2009-02-07

Posts 120
West Coast

5 posted 2009-05-08 10:06 AM

wonderfully expressed

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2009-05-08 11:22 AM

unboundpoetess
Member

since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

7 posted 2009-05-08 07:41 PM

I love your quiet song.

H

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2009-05-08 09:56 PM

This is such an emotional write.

Your ending is sadly beautiful and seemed to soften the blow.

Welcome to Passions, AlluraD~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2009-05-11 05:05 AM

Well done, Lou.
Ida

AlluraD
Junior Member

since 2009-05-06

Posts 28
Florida

10 posted 2009-05-12 11:48 AM

My thanks to each for reading this oen and for taking the time to share your thoughts on it...appreciate both very much~
Lou

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2009-05-13 06:34 PM

Lots of feelings here...James

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