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Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

0 posted 2009-05-03 09:41 PM

Look at them all
Small-minded bitter people
Hanging out in dank, old-man bars,
Drinking from their mugs of sadness and failure
As life passes them by
Angered at the world that has forgotten them
Disputing the life they have led
Spewing hate towards the insanity
They see around them
Yet, not having the courage to take on
The sea of madness brought on by power
They complain that no one listens
No one wishes to do what is right
Somehow, no one hears them
As they refuse to get involved
To change their destiny
It is easier to shout at the rain
Than to buy a new umbrella to protect them
Or for you to look in the mirror
And see the solution staring back

But this one goes to eleven...
http://www.hubpages.com/profile/RingoShort

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2009-05-03 11:59 PM

Ringo - how about 'Look Into The Mirror', it's what I see when I read this...

BC

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2009-05-04 01:45 AM

How about "Did You Vote?" - I like this, Ringo. I so often find that people are bitter and complain - and then they never cast a vote in the elections. We all have to participate to have a voice and make changes.

Alison

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2009-05-04 07:57 AM

"It is easier to shout at the rain
Than to buy a new umbrella to protect them
Or for you to look in the mirror
And see the solution staring back"

love this verse, Ringo

how about "Mirrored Silence"

M

Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

4 posted 2009-05-04 11:20 AM

Thank you all...
I truly appreciate the suggestions, and as I am a complete coward, I am allowing my girlfriend to choose the title from the ones offered.

But this one goes to eleven...
http://www.hubpages.com/profile/RingoShort

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2009-05-04 11:24 AM

My ability to effectively title poems is pretty poor. Please tell your girlfriend that I won't cry in my bitter beer (there's a title for you) when I don't get selected. (grins) I do like the poem a lot.

Alison

Osprey
Member

since 2009-04-12

Posts 249

6 posted 2009-05-04 12:12 PM

I like your poem, too. You've done a good job here, Ringo.
How about: 'Just Another, Verbal Revolution'

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

7 posted 2009-05-04 02:21 PM

How about "Waisted"
everything your poem is talking about,

I talked my friend out of going to the bar every night for one month and save what he would have spent on booze.
The next month he went and bought a new car.

Tracey.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2009-05-04 02:25 PM

They say that a good poet has good powers of observation! By this poem, I'd say the proof is in the pudding!

Linda

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