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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Breathe Once again I breathe Softly my heart My heart beat racing I breathe once again When you love me Let the rain pour Against softly my window So deep To the night To the dawn To the morning Everywhere I go Everything I do I breathe Softly my heart whispers When you call my name My heart beats fast I can heart my hear breathing I breathe |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Vandana, I see you're in the United States now. I hope you enjoy it here. This poem has a good thought to it. In the line: "I can heart my hear breathing" I think you may have "heart" and "hear" switched around. Love Bobby |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear vandana, keep on breathing ~ and writing. This one is especially sweet.   Linda |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Very delicate writing.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When you call my name My heart beats fast I can heart my hear breathing I breathe Just lovely! *S* I like this very much! |
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