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song of wrong solomon
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song of wrong solomon |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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she cried when I said I was going to jail but smiled when I said it was to pick up mom for fighting again at senior's bingo she cried when I said I was married but smiled when I told her how many times and when the last one was over with she cried when I said I had been abused for mostly nearly all of my life but smiled when I said I did it myself often she cried when I said I was not into girls but smiled when I said I did enjoy women long as they were full grown and moaning she cried when I said I only slept alone but smiled when I said I would be awake all night if she wouldn't mind following me home she cried when I said it was nearly morning but smiled when I kissed her eyes and pulled the shades completely closed and said I hoped she wasn't yet too tired _______________ daark |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are so bad yer good. Now MARCH, young man, to the weeping willow, and cut me a "switch". Then be gentle with me?  *laughing* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms serene..thanks for the abuse to your eyes and mind here...grin |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The word "intriguing" comes to mind when I think of the poem ~ and the poet. lol |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ea...thanks lady!! |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
"long as they were full grown and moaning" The best kind of woman right? This was a great, fun read. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks cg... |
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Raindance Member
since 2009-02-07
Posts 120West Coast |
I smiled at your irresistible presentation. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
raindance...your smile smiles me..thank you.. do you know the legend of raindance? let me know if you are interested.. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love the topsy-turvy journey through tears and cheers (okay... smiles... but you know I have to rhyme, right? LOL)... who could ever tire of such perfection? *S* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms suthern Thanks for the smile babe |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
you are the 'bad boy' my mother raised me not to be  perhaps, that is why I enjoy your work so much...you are forbidden fruit |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I hate to admit this, or spoil it for future readings, But I can honestly say "I understood every word you wrote", Now that's scary. I also enjoyed every word of this, so clever poem. Very nice. Tracey. |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
I am taken buy your expression of understanding in this work, very nice indeed! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
steavenr...mom didn't raise me this way either, but right after I fell off the turnip truck I rolled into the gutter behind a bordello.......so..thanks guy. ______________ WT..yes that is scary if I am that easy to read..I will have to work on that.. ________________ SeraB...thank you for the read and comments.. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks van |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This shows how good you are in drying tears, though I bet you have caused some too (when it is over!)! It sounds different in a way, but it captivates strongly as usual. Missed reading you. Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar..was more of a playful arrangement thank you for the touch ms |
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