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She cried today
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She cried today |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
she cried today the gentle tears whispered down her red swollen cheeks softly, she whimpered and swallowed hard as the tears fell and touched her chilled skin she opened her eyes and looked to the sky. cloudy and gray like the cold inside her her dreams, mired in the mud puddles before her, swirled into the wet dust her hopes cast aside like a leaf in a storm like many have before the rain cares not where they land feeling the cool chill of loneliness, she shuddered, with the leaves in the breeze. .... the vibration in her hand... .... she looked to read... "I love you... but..." another tear fell to the cold wet ground... ... and the rain cared not |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear SeraphimBroken, This is a sad and interesting write. Love Bobby |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
'I love you...but' A euphemism for...I don't love you at all. A hard-hitting ending to your poem, that offers no sympathy to any age. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SeraphimBroken - a sad interesting writing... BC |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
Bobby; Bill; Thanks for the read, yes it is sad. I hope that it expresses the true loneliness felt for what it was. It was hard to find the words to express the thoughts, but i think it came out alright... i think.  Osprey; "I love you... but.." no matter how these words come out,as you get older you finally discover their true meaning and you learn to look past "I love you", Thank you so much for the read |
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