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k_love_02 Junior Member
since 2008-07-07
Posts 24 |
Women! Take your places, its time to start the show. Ladies if you don’t know your place, soon enough you’ll know. The children call from stage left, and your husband from stage right, That’s your queue, it’s your chance, tonight is your big night. The curtains up the spotlights on, you’re standing at the sink, The only place in this whole show, you can be alone and think. And the show is never over there’s never a curtain call, never a standing ovation, sometimes no applause at all. However you still take your bow, someone threw a rose at your feet, And that was all you needed, for the show to be complete. [This message has been edited by k_love_02 (04-18-2009 02:06 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, a delightful write! I just do my own thing these days, don't give it a second (or first!) thought. |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
Hey, I'm the first to applaud a good woman and mother, but this has overtones of Germaine Greer, burning bras and neglected children. Good poem, but I'm lost in the past; so far in the past that I can remember men working twelve hour days, and having nothing more than a cold, kitchen sink to wipe away the grime of coal. It's a hard life. Bit harsh, that, sorry x [This message has been edited by Osprey (04-18-2009 02:18 PM).] |
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k_love_02 Junior Member
since 2008-07-07
Posts 24 |
I think overall, it's meant to give the impression of wive, mother, etc. all the roles a mother plays. Men (not all men) but most men don't jump in to be the housekeeper, the child rearer, the chef, the maid, the laundress, the nurse, the doctor, etc. etc. its an ever ending show. Just because your husband comes home doesn't mean you get to stop what you are doing. Maybe I can tweek it to get that point across. |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
You tweeked just fine, k -love. Think I just lost my sense of humour momentarily; apologies. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sweet, sensitive, compassionate, appreciative ~ and downright entertaining! Loved it!   Linda |
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k_love_02 Junior Member
since 2008-07-07
Posts 24 |
NO worries, it did need a little bit more to make it "whole" thank you!  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
k_love_02 - so true to life, nice write... BC |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Too bad that this is the way some men see their wives. You did just fine on this. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
k_love_02 A good write and it tells the story of many wives, especially in the past when men went to work and came home to a clean home, children clean and waiting and dinner ready. Not a bad scene but somehow it was all on her shoulders. latearrival |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Good tribute to women in our society makes men think a bit. Its hard work for sure this. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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