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Open Poetry #44

Deep-Time Entanglement

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2009-04-09 08:31 PM

  Deep-Time Entanglement

Beneath ever-rippling stars
finest moonlight deftly slips
through diaphanous clouds
that drift and dance
with the whims of a careless
   wind
in gathering roaming waves
above secret, silent depths
of the wide, wild sea…
all remains forever conjoined
in infinitely grand, symphonic
deep-time entanglement.

      --- b. e. adams (4/9/2009)

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (04-09-2009 09:09 PM).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2009-04-09 08:40 PM

ok. This is my favorite from you.

"wow" doesn't cover it!! I am going to print this one if it's ok with you??

*pretty please*

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2009-04-09 09:04 PM

Yo Secondhanddreampoet,

I'd drop the cap in "all" in the third line from the bottom, unless you add another dot to the ellipse. It makes more sense as just plain "all".

Bobby

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2009-04-09 10:03 PM

This poem is just beautiful and as deep as the wide, wild sea.
Ida

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2009-04-11 09:34 AM

MHO, this is one of your best.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2009-04-13 10:45 AM

Absolutely beautiful! *S*

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