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Hunting. |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England 
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 Hunting. Call of the wind on the desert sand, The flash of life in the eyes, Hot breath of the wolf searching, Hiding to survive Slinking around in the undergrowth, Waiting till the time is right, Using all their ability, Searching through the night, Like spirits they are invisible, They hide from the brightness of the day, Keeping all their mystery hidden, Not giving there souls away, They hunt within the silence, Only moving to close in on there prey, The magic of the pack is hunting, Until the dawning of the day, Annie |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
No doubt the wolves are fascinating creatures and for their preys, very frightening too. Well done, dear Annie. Love, Margherita [This message has been edited by Margherita (04-07-2009 05:05 PM).] |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Hey, Annie, I enjoyed this one. The feel was primordial, and it brought to mind the magnificence of nature. Yes, your spelling needs work. You have 'there' for the possessive 'their' throughout the poem, and it should be 'prey', not 'pray'. 'pray' is what you do when you give the blessing before eating your 'prey'.  Other than that, the poem seemed faultless to me.Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you Margherita thats very kind of you Thank you for your feedback |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you pilgrim i know my spelling sucks i could never grasp the different ways of spelling words that mean the same ok i have corrected my mistakes.. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Annie, This is a very good description of wolves. Wolves efficiently go about their business. Love Bobby |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you Bobby I am glad you liked it |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Anniepimm - I was pleasently surprised when I opened this writing, as I enjoyed reading it. And, a German Shepard/Wolf just joined me, and he's a treat. Three months out and has a lot of traits of a Wolf... BC |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
Wolves are beautiful creatures. Wonderful job, Annie. ~Maranda |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Annie, that's a great picture of the wolves and I loved your poem, most enjoyable. Love to you my friend. Lindsay |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you Bill, Maranda, and Lindsay, for your feedback it's lovely to know that my writing gives people pleaser..  |
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KillerEagle2009 New Member
since 2009-04-08
Posts 8Kansas, USA!!! |
Sereously, this one is one of the best poems i've ever read, allmost that of Edgar Allen poe...well..almost but not his syle, but sereously i like how you wrote your poem, its soo...i dont know how to put my finger on, but it was awesome. I love poems like these, gives you a sense of either being there or you are the character and you can picture the scenery, i love peoms like that. Keep it up, you are good. ^_^ |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Awwww Thank you so much KillerEagle2009 That is praise indeed being classed with Edgar Allan Poe one of my fave poets and writers.. Cool |
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