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XOx Uriah xOX
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0 posted 2009-04-06 01:56 PM



David heard
the engine rev
Heard the transmission
slip into a higher gear.
Saw the truck
increase it's speed
Saw the dog
fly into the air

There was no denying the intention.

I saw
the snarl
on David's lips
Heard the
low growl
coming up
from his gut
and into his throat
I saw
the barrel
pointing
toward the escapee
Heard the hammer
cock back

There was no denying the intention.

I heard myself say,
"David, holster the hogleg"

The glaze
over his eyes
cleared away
and the leather
embraced the steel,
with no questions asked

Curves
were straightened
as we pursued the murderer.
Gravel crunched
beneath our tires
as we slowly pulled
into the parking lot.
We saw the truck
sitting near the front door
of the old Country Store.

I heard him ask,
"You ready?"
Heard myself reply,
"If you're bound and determined"

He heard me say,
"There aint no way
for this to end well"

"He's a local
and probably
on first name basis
with everyone in there"

"You know
what kind of mentality
you're dealing with here"

"We aint
going in there
to talk sense"

I said,
"Remember the"Line""

He knew what I meant

"The Line" is constant
and if something draws
you close to "The Line"...
you have to weigh it.

Once
"The Line"
is crossed,
there aint no telling
where you will end up.

So...
if whatever
drew you
to the edge
is not worth
dying over
or worth
killing over...
it aint worth
crossing
"The Line"

David said,
"But, Mojo,
It just aint right"

I heard myself reply,
"I know it aint, Hoss

and whatever you decide...
I've got your back"

"but...
is this really the way
you want the Legend to end?"

He laughed
We laughed

Those that
did not know us
would have sworn
we were growling.

The old Country Store
was filled with grace

***

© Copyright 2009 Larry F. Leake - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 2009-04-06 02:00 PM


I love this!!! From the understandable rage to the laughter of let it go... what a great story!!
Margherita
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Eternity
2 posted 2009-04-07 05:45 PM


Dear Larry, you had me spellbound with this one. Wise ending, even if it's not right ... but the crossing of "the Line" can really put one on the wrong side.

Love,
Margherita

Alison
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3 posted 2009-04-21 12:37 PM


Honestly, this is one of those moments when I thank God that I came back through the pages to catch up.  I am saving this one and I not letting it go.

It's bonafide.

A

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23
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california
4 posted 2009-04-21 04:19 AM


this is great.

wonderful imagery...you had me at crunched gravel. haha

Joe

steavenr
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5 posted 2009-04-21 12:23 PM


love your storytelling; sad to see this one end...moving, capturing the imagination and bringing the reader into the intricacies of the write...well done
serenity blaze
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6 posted 2009-04-21 06:49 PM


Wow.

You have a unique poetic voice, m'friend. I particularly enjoy your characterizations. I truly enjoy all of your poetry, but this one is a standout, and I shall try to keep the wisdom you imparted with "Remember the Line."

*smile*

I have moments of brash anger, and too often I forget to pause to weigh that line.

Thank you, lovie. You have me totally captivated with this other slice of life that you write of lately.


WTBAKELAR
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7 posted 2009-04-21 09:25 PM


First, I want to Thank Alison for pulling this back to the top,  
I would never have known what I missed, but now I am so glad that I didn't

Very cool.
Tracey

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