Open Poetry #44 |
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Growling at Hyenas |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia ![]() |
David heard the engine rev Heard the transmission slip into a higher gear. Saw the truck increase it's speed Saw the dog fly into the air There was no denying the intention. I saw the snarl on David's lips Heard the low growl coming up from his gut and into his throat I saw the barrel pointing toward the escapee Heard the hammer cock back There was no denying the intention. I heard myself say, "David, holster the hogleg" The glaze over his eyes cleared away and the leather embraced the steel, with no questions asked Curves were straightened as we pursued the murderer. Gravel crunched beneath our tires as we slowly pulled into the parking lot. We saw the truck sitting near the front door of the old Country Store. I heard him ask, "You ready?" Heard myself reply, "If you're bound and determined" He heard me say, "There aint no way for this to end well" "He's a local and probably on first name basis with everyone in there" "You know what kind of mentality you're dealing with here" "We aint going in there to talk sense" I said, "Remember the"Line"" He knew what I meant "The Line" is constant and if something draws you close to "The Line"... you have to weigh it. Once "The Line" is crossed, there aint no telling where you will end up. So... if whatever drew you to the edge is not worth dying over or worth killing over... it aint worth crossing "The Line" David said, "But, Mojo, It just aint right" I heard myself reply, "I know it aint, Hoss and whatever you decide... I've got your back" "but... is this really the way you want the Legend to end?" He laughed We laughed Those that did not know us would have sworn we were growling. The old Country Store was filled with grace *** |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this!!! From the understandable rage to the laughter of let it go... what a great story!! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Larry, you had me spellbound with this one. Wise ending, even if it's not right ... but the crossing of "the Line" can really put one on the wrong side. Love, Margherita |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Honestly, this is one of those moments when I thank God that I came back through the pages to catch up. I am saving this one and I not letting it go. It's bonafide. A |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
this is great. wonderful imagery...you had me at crunched gravel. haha Joe |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
love your storytelling; sad to see this one end...moving, capturing the imagination and bringing the reader into the intricacies of the write...well done |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow. You have a unique poetic voice, m'friend. I particularly enjoy your characterizations. I truly enjoy all of your poetry, but this one is a standout, and I shall try to keep the wisdom you imparted with "Remember the Line." *smile* I have moments of brash anger, and too often I forget to pause to weigh that line. Thank you, lovie. You have me totally captivated with this other slice of life that you write of lately. ![]() |
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since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
First, I want to Thank Alison for pulling this back to the top, I would never have known what I missed, but now I am so glad that I didn't Very cool. Tracey |
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