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of fire in the twixt of toes |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I have walked hot gravel fast barefoot in July. I have done some things so dumb I was nearly branded "daft". And in some corners, I still am, because I type "I am" too much. As if the pretense of pronoun eliminates the personal-- I am the one who sees the stuff and interprets it to verse letter by the letter word without the I, no thing would die and worse? No thing would live. I do not know your world wherein it is polite to not exist or exhibit traits therein the ego is intangible -- seen but never heard? Absurd! I think that this is much pretense and sure, it makes life less intense to detach yourself from it and court-report the poetry pretending that "I" can't exist or worse, the words "should not" eclipse the color of your mother's womb whence she did convulse you born... I have walked hot gravel, slow, blistering my feet. I have pretended it was snow and felt the lessening of fire in the twixt of toes as I measured each one's stretch-- popping bubbled tar in streets and once? I broke my etch-a-sketch to see just how it worked. I'm not bragging brilliance, nor regretting time ill-spent - for when I crashed the frame of it in childish histrionic fit I came to realize that it won't work without my twiddling the dials of...I am. * * * Um, I am, as ever, open to suggestions--especially on the title. I don't like my title here, but I couldn't think of anything better.  thanks in advance! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
and thank God you "are" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and "you are" one who can make me forget that "I am..." (that's a good thing, too, it's like...relationship zen)  egads yer lovely |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
uhhh the title got me in here K and? you  I have ran down (barefoot) hot, sharp gravel, trying to keep up with my older brother who was always faster...and had longer legs...and liked to dare me to do things he knew I would never win at....LOL  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sue-sea? mmmmmmmmmmmmmmuah... I'm so confused lately. I mean, I can't remember last week (or even ten minutes ago) but I can remember things now from when I was seven. Like how it feels to cuddle blankets of clover with no fear of bees... So, thank you, I guess the title stays. Unless? I forget I said that and somebody suggests somethin' better.  and grinslove ya ladytats |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
and once? I broke my etch-a-sketch to see just how it worked. Me too! I think we are both daft? Night night.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
see? "chicks dig me."  gawdess loves ye, my mysterian! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
it IS sooooooooooo good to read you, i have missed your tremendous mind m'ladylove. I like the title too |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh....now there's m'ladylove! *fade to black* and silk drop curtains...silhouettes only. Use yer imagination. I love you my muah. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
i'm using ....  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh my. Now I am too!  heh?  <--don't mind the beard. *grin*I'm getting me some hormones soon. Maybe even sooner than I hoped? HA!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ohhhhhhhhhhh now shush... you are not worthy of these cheap silly jokes. I love you, lovely. She's pearls, folks. Pearls.  |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
clever poem anything with toes in it grabs my attention immediatedly. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oh I don't know, the beard could come in handy....lol you make me naughty. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hon... you may not brag brilliance... but we'll do that for you. *S* And this poem?? You do recall that I was brought up in screams-of-fire-and-brimstone Bible-slapping-Baptist churches, right?? *G* Well... picture this Sister sitting primly between bellows of AMEN!!! *S* Title to last word... though barefoot memories and poetic cartwheels... I bow in awe. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I read these kind replies and feel so overwhelmed with gratitude--it is as if I hit the friendship lottery! Such lovely ladies, my my... and oh the gentlemen. I am, grateful, I am. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
René Descartes would scream with delight, "At last somebody understands me!" As for me, I tried sanity once for half an hour and it drove me insane. And don't you DARE change the title! Or else!!! Owl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Celeste What can I say. I just love what floats around in that intense poetic mind of yours. Makes me smile. " And in some corners, I still am, because I type "I am" too much. As if the pretense of pronoun eliminates the personal-- I am the one who sees the stuff and interprets it to verse letter by the letter word without the I, no thing would die and worse?" "No thing would live" You are without a doubt a precious stringer of self investigation. Hope you're gonna be around for a long time because this world's a better place with you in it. Take care Eric |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Oh dirty-ness! ! Now now! LOL Karen you crack me up. Here I am, almost falling off my chair in laughter! ~ Geeze you guys, too funny ARCTIC WIND |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Oh can't forget, you're a naughty one karen ARCTIC WIND |
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