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Open Poetry #44

Fear of the door

critical mass
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since 2009-03-25

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0 posted 2009-04-01 06:13 AM

He hears distant shouts,
like words muffled through a string tied between tin cans.
"Do it man,
Shoot the lock.
I'm right behind you."

Pressed hard against the bricks of Falujah
he prays to Kasal,
curses the lock,
tries to will himself through the door.

His body sticks to the brick.

critical mass
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1 posted 2009-04-01 07:18 AM

prays to Kasal
http://state29.blogspot.com/2006/09/my-men-are-heroes-brad-kasal-story.html

This may help you with the Kasal thingy.

angellea
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since 2009-03-29

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2 posted 2009-04-01 01:21 PM

So powerful. I literally have chills running up my arms. Thanks for including the link to the story. How brave he is. Wonderful job!

SEA

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Member Seraphic

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3 posted 2009-04-01 02:32 PM

this took me to the moment...great job, and thanks for the link...

I've got #2 going in the AF next week....

unboundpoetess
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4 posted 2009-04-02 04:52 PM

Gosh, CM. This tensed me up.
Strong work.

Heather

critical mass
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5 posted 2009-04-03 01:13 AM

angellea

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unboundpoetess

Thank you for the replies.
I wrote this one day when my son made the comment that sometimes you just have to pray that Kasal shows up. Then he explained the whole thing to me.

Alison

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6 posted 2009-04-13 11:40 PM

I went to the link and read after reading the poem. Then I waited an hour or so and came back to read the poem again. It's very powerful.

Alison

critical mass
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7 posted 2009-04-14 04:32 AM

Thanks for the reply

My son was in falujah when this happened.
He said "That guy is like a God over here."
He said if you are in trouble, just pray that Kasal shows up.
Then he told me about how nerve racking it was going door to door.
I put the two together and came up with this.

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