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It’s through our children that we build today
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It’s through our children that we build today |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
I have just written this villanelle as part of a speech to be given at school for Children's Day. Feedbacks and suggestions would be greatly welcome. Mark It’s through our children that we build today, Through education’s most important aims: Tomorrow’s global peace depends on play. And I can tell you on this Children’s Day That I see hope in all your loved one’s names: It’s through our children that we build today. In every classes beautiful display I see in your beloved’s study games; Tomorrow’s global peace depends on play. The future peace that will keep wars at bay I see embodied in your children’s frames: It’s through our children that we build today A world that’s free of human-made decay Depends on them, of hope they are our flames Tomorrow’s global peace depends on play It’s through my work that heartily I pray A better world will grow out of their fames It’s through our children that we build today; Tomorrow’s global peace depends on play. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The well meaning of these words is beautiful Marc. What can I say other than I hope the speech goes well and all understand the importance of the message. take care Eric |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Eric, Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave your feedback. Mark |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I find writing a villanelle a bit of a hair-puller! lol It's like following a difficult recipe!  You did a wonderful job of writing this one ~ and the message is timely and of great import. Good luck! Spread the word! ~ and keep on writing!   EA |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is a significant message, beautifully conveyed. I have no patience to learn and write specific poetic forms (other than haiku ...), but I can see the pattern here and I love it, as the repetition holds indeed the core of the speech. Love, Margherita |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You follow the form well. "Every classes" is grammatically incorrect but the poem has a good message. Good luck to you.... |
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