Open Poetry #44 |
The Pleasure of Our Pain (Song Lyrics) |
Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
I've been working on the music for this over the last two weeks. It's a more traditional doom metal song than the first song I posted, this one has no verse, chorus, verse structure. But there is a structure between two shifting rhythm sections and two interchanging melodic instrumental parts. The key's A minor with a flat 2nd (I think you call it Phrygian or a spanish minor). Anyway, let me know what you think of the lyrics please, it's played and song very slowly and mournfully. This story of passion's soft fold Will end in grief before it's told As you lay down before me now I see the sweat bead on your brow Your luscious eyes, delicate skin Your heaving breast, the heart within Like no other, divinity in flesh Angel of God caught in the mesh I shroud my ebon wings About our bed of lust To conceal our every sin For we are but dust Pale moonlight wanes In darkened skies The pleasure of our pain In ecstatic cries It couldn't last, two broken hearts Entwined in grief, driven apart Flame like the sun in misery Our passion quenched in apathy Lair of sorrow deep Is where I've come to rest The memories I keep Clasped tight to my chest The pain it fades away Soon I will be gone In sorrow you will stay My beloved one Will you weep for me my love? Little goddess, my gentle dove Will you wander in fading light? Will you feel my lips every night? In these lonely halls no moon will weep, no sun will shine. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Luke, I liked this a lot |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Very melancholic, but very beautifully written, dear Luke. It touches the heart. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You are a fine writer of poetry ~ and lyrics. You have so much passion and love in you to share with the world. Keep on writing, and writing! You have the gift! Linda |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Suncleaver - like the words, would love to hear this played with a soulful guitar... BC |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love the lyrics! *S* And played slowly and mournfully???? Better furnish tissues for the tears. *S* Beautiful work! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Beautifully written indeed! ~ Enjoyed the song ARCTIC WIND |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
sorry I missed this, I thought I had already replied, but the song, I would love to hear "Live" with music and all... brilliant lyrics....when can we sing? |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
As soon as you learn how to fly. Not much chance of me getting myself and my bassist with all our gear over to america now I'm officialy a poor student. If you have a spare keyboard player, and a drummer (I'd like a violin player as well but we can all dream) that would be useful. That was a beautiful picture by the way. I've missed you... |
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