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icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2009-03-27 10:20 PM

When you were young,
yearning for the burning taste of fear,
demanding in your wishes of being helpless
and submissive in your dreams,
I treated you to soft ropes' illusion of chains,
careful to avoid life's pains
just beyond fuzzy edges of lust's distorted lens
in shadow's nightmare theater of heart's desires
where your mostly muffled screams were filled with ecstasy,
and I wondered how future paths would bend to meet your needs.

Now nothing's left to fill places love was taking
in spaces scattered amongst weeds
where once were flowers growing
between stepping stones leading
through life's maze of wandering
in empty fields once filled with bounty
of reality's wishes and dreams.

©2009 by icebox

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Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

1 posted 2009-03-27 11:17 PM

I enjoyed how the beginning started with the greatness, then it lead to the less light in the poem... Very poetic

ARCTIC WIND

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2009-03-28 07:28 PM

Incredibly intense write, dear Poet.

I am impressed.

Love,
Margherita

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2009-03-29 07:01 AM

"Now nothing's left to fill places love was taking
in spaces scattered amongst weeds
where once were flowers growing
between stepping stones leading
through life's maze of wandering
in empty fields once filled with bounty
of reality's wishes and dreams."

every line touches~~

M

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2009-03-29 07:35 PM

a powerful 'write'!

MUCH applause !!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2009-03-29 09:47 PM

Oh my goodness, you are such an extraordinary poet.

I especially liked the idea of being submissive to our dreams,
and the fuzzy edges of lusts distorted lens.

Bravo bravo, Sir, you are the man!!

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

6 posted 2009-03-29 09:51 PM

Yo Icebox,

And here I was looking for a good card game.

Bobby

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