The Tale of the Critical Husband

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Open Poetry #44

The Tale of the Critical Husband

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2009-01-07 06:43 PM

The Tale of the Critical Husband

In a restaurant worked a fine waitress
that was appreciated by the men that came in.
She was married but didn't wear her ring,
her husband was neither her lover nor friend.
When she was at home her husband treated
her mean and criticized her constantly,
when working in the restaurant her customers
took the time to compliment her graciously.
As her feelings for her husband grew less and less
the men in the restaurant felt her distress.
They told her what a beautiful woman she was.
They told her how fine a waitress she was.
One day she decided to walk away from him,
the critical husband that didn't understand.
For her there would be no desires to turn back.
No matter how hard he tried she never came back.

JamesLee
06January
2009

She Never Returned

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2009-01-07 06:52 PM

I know a couple who lived this story. It took her sixty-five years, but she walked.

Good poem, James.

Alison

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2009-01-07 07:21 PM

James,

Husbands that are critical should be transferred to the Intensive Care Unit, and put on life support.

Bobby

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

3 posted 2009-01-08 12:48 PM

we always take for granted that which we think is guaranteed.... love.

Lovely gifting here James... enjoyed

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2009-01-08 01:11 AM

I don't blame her. We all need commendation from time to time. That's why I'll give you commendation on the story and presentation of this poem.

Eric

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