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Fizzle Junior Member
since 2009-03-21
Posts 38 |
There are those who live on magic and those who don't and those who lead a life tragic plus those who won't There are those who live in fear and those who live in boundless love Those who don't stray from the near and those who reach for stars above There are those who dare only crawl and those who walk afar There are those trapped in red walls and those who livers are There are those that remain forever mute and there are those who greatly sing There are those who follow shoddy routes and those who go where no one's been [This message has been edited by Fizzle (03-21-2009 10:04 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I have enjoyed both of your poems. You have a unique perspective, that is a poetry of its own. I would really like to see you try some free style, with less concern for rhyme. I didn't see your request for critique, but its a positive comment I wish to make. Your lines take on a life of their own.  |
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Fizzle Junior Member
since 2009-03-21
Posts 38 |
How do I request critiques? Also, I'm unaware of styles, so I don't know what I'm writing. I thought it was free style, since I didn't have one at all. Thanks for the input. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
~Grin Actually is a style, AB rhyme. To request critique, got to Member's Area and update your profile. Free style is whatever flows, might rhyme some places, but the poetry is clear nonetheless. I'll read. |
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Fizzle Junior Member
since 2009-03-21
Posts 38 |
well, I'll be damned. I probably was imitating some poem structure or something. Or maybe it just happened. |
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