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Music From The Corner of Spring
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Music From The Corner of Spring |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I can feel the dirt is moving On the tips of green I see it As the sun fills sky with morning It is building bone on skin now And the deepening of darkness Is because the day is lighter as the ducks flying to summer Find my open morning window I can see the breath of springtime In the creeping warmth of breezes And the shaking of the rooftops Is the scattered raindrops drying I can feel my skin get lighter And its cloth makes silk from flannel For the window will be softened Chill be taken from the curtains And I want to travel seaward Across the nape towards summer Fill my buckets with the fragrant Seaweed shells and sandy dollars And I know the snow of fresh fall Will be melting on the mountains And the apple painted sunsets Will swallow whole the day in lovely For the winter now is over Its cold sheets of curled sleeping Leaving shadows to delight in Fine for feather-pillowed nighttime As I feel the warming fire From the hands across the seasons Fill my cart with favorites Walking with me into April No matter what the season's heart-song It is the window that opens inward That is the music from the corner of going home -------------- revised from 3-04 [This message has been edited by Martie (03-21-2009 02:04 PM).] |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I love this Martie! ~ Beautifully written  ARCTIC WIND |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie, this is one of your very best. Waiting for my "girls" to come and then will let Tori recite it aloud. She does your poetry such justice. Beautifully uplifting as we are about to get snow again tonight I think. Carpe' Diem, |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
In a cadence of forward motion, you paint the coming of spring with new colors. THose seen through your eyes are always new and memorable, Thank you martie for this array of images, and the promise of things to come - always a wonderfu topic for a poet's pen Loved it Love you Liz |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Ohh my God, this is beautiful Martie. It's pure Mary Oliver but better than many of hers. So so many memorable moments in this poem to compliment you on, and I just wasted all my time replying in silly threads about CA. However I will return "As the sun fills sky with morning" as you so beautifully put it, to do this poem justice. This is one for your next collection for certain. Thanks. Rob |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
great imagery: "I can see the breath of springtime In the creeping warmth of breezes And the shaking of the rooftops Is the scattered raindrops drying" fine seasonal 'write'! much applause for this 'penning'!! |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
What can I say that hasn't been said yet? I won't try other than to add my voice of appreciation to all the others. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Only you sweet flower girl could pen this beauty from your heart. Oh how it made me feel the warmth. I simply love this! "As I feel the warming fire From the hands across the seasons Fill my cart with favorites Walking with me into April No matter what the season's heart-song It is the window that opens inward That is the music from the corner of going home" The window that opens inward ah yes, that's so special to me. Well because, that's where my music comes from too. Take care my dear girl. Eric |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Martie I'm feeling jealous of the creativity and originality displayed in a poem written in the Open forum of PiP. Times are indeed a'changing. I've reviewed all the other "music from" poems, they are all good, way beyond the quality of writing normally found on public message boards. But in the many years I've "known" you you have gradually improved to achieve extraordinary consistency of quality. The thing that distinguishes this poem is the way you have maintained the depth of the imagery. What I mean by that is that, whereas most good writing employs fresh and clear imagery, the best writing endows the images with the power of transformation: the power of becoming more than they are. It's one of the ways that poem becomes more than the sum of its parts, the way it says more than the words say. In my view it's the main way, at least the way I personally respond to best. It's pointless to pick out highlights from this because there are so many. Neither can I make suggestions for improvement except possibly to say that I'm a bit iffy about the use of "lovely" as a noun. But in the face of such writing it seems rather churlish to point this out. Many thanks M |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Still a little chilly here in PA, but when coming home from work yesterday I saw a beautiful hillside of daffodils opening. They are our first signs of Spring. Lovely images, as always M |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
The manner with which you weave in and out of the fabric of language is delightfully intriguing. Spring is on my mind, as well, we have had sunshine and showers and today is gray, but it is like the dawning just before the promised joy is revealed. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Martie, thank you dear poet for this depth of renewed-life write. It is exquisite. Your imagery and the way you connect the touch of nature to the human heart are magnificent word bouquets. Happy Spring, dearest poet. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Martie, what a treat to read this magnificent Spring poem today! Through your words the scent of Spring enters through my own open windows too. So so beautiful! Love, Margherita  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sissie, I'll have to just agree with Moonbeam on his comments...because you are all of that, and more.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Pure perfection as only the magnificent Martie can pen... beautiful work!!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi all you wonderful poetic friends! Thanks so much for your comments...much appreciated. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - it's nice to see your words again, enjoyed them in this writing... BC |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I can feel my skin get lighter And its cloth makes silk from flannel For the window will be softened Chill be taken from the curtains And I want to travel seaward Across the nape towards summer Fill my buckets with the fragrant Seaweed shells and sandy dollars" and.... "No matter what the season's heart-song It is the window that opens inward That is the music from the corner of going home" perfection!  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I love these Martie moments where you fill my senses with beauty! Oh, what a gift you have, Lady! I could just imagine the peeling buds, stretching and clothing themselves in their Spring wear! What a lovely, lovely poem! When I read it aloud, I found myself especially drawn to this verse, although they were all quite lovely: "And I want to travel seaward Across the nape towards summer Fill my buckets with the fragrant Seaweed shells and sandy dollars" Hugs, Misce' |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ahhhh ... now that was a rush of fresh spring air from your words, directly into my being. There's no need for me to step outside ... I can feel it through your words Martie. Beautifully visual as always. I have missed reading you. This was wonderful! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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