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Open Poetry #44

The Tree and The Man

Reborn_Phoenix
Junior Member

since 2009-03-04

Posts 11

0 posted 2009-03-21 02:47 AM

A tree stands alone on a hill
as a beacon of light
drawing man toward
its silent flame.

Man shall not deny the will
of the fire at night
for in darkness it
brings comfort.

Aflame, the tree lives still,
and it does not fight
the flame which
burns it so.

It shall no cease burning till
man, by flame's might,
is turned to ash and
burnt alive.

[This message has been edited by Reborn_Phoenix (03-21-2009 12:35 PM).]

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2009-03-21 11:46 AM

Yo Reborn_Phoenix,

In your last strophe it would make more sense to say:

"Is turned (to) ash and"

Bobby

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