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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
How can I love when my soul is so empty? And how can I mend with this sick broken heart? I'm searching for answers that lack just the question. Deprived of all meaning as I fall apart. I'm lost in a world that knows nothing about me. Angry and raged, watch me tear it all down. Unwilling to change cause they've already changed me. The violence inside me just begs to come out. I'm dead on the inside but my face never shows. Fearful of ignorance and things I don't know. The rains pouring down and I'm scared for my life. And this ones because it just all had to rhyme. January 6th 2009 Emily Shives |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is one is chock full of goodies...I liked this part especially: "Unwilling to change cause they've already changed me"...it is an interesting observation about life experiences (oh, and I loved that last line) |
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Ethernaut Junior Member
since 2009-04-07
Posts 31NT, Australia |
Beautiful Reminds me of many nights past, with the dawn viewed from the flipside, as well as tonight. Beauty can be found in all places, even within the darkness of the soul. |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Emily, Very intense, I really liked the last line, They don't always have to rhyme, but what a thoughtful way of ending, by showing that a poem is after all, a poem. Nice, Tracey. |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Life does rhyme, your poem proves it, bittersweet at times, but living through it means we're still living, enjoyed, Bloodline |
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