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Crimson Sky
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Crimson Sky On volcanic rocks awash under a black and crimson sky we dance the tarantella defy the wind you and I. The tide goes out in ebbing swells, midnight breaks like crystal bells, and we go back to our private hells. I choke on fuming sulfur, you dine on tea and frost until the next storm rises and we madly skip over lines they tell us not to cross. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I won't get that music out of my head now, Nan. I remember that piano piece...not an easy one... I'll have to go dig it out of the piano bench, and see if it comes back to my fingertips as well as it did my memory.   |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Nan, I like how you skip. A |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I really love the rhythm here. And the imagery? Damn. Loved it. |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
This is excellent poetry!! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Pilgrimage - reads like a song, and a good one at that... BC |
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Quiet Waters Junior Member
since 2009-03-13
Posts 15IN, USA |
Very nice piece. Evokes great imagery ~ which I love! In just two days, tomorrow will be yesterday! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Yes indeed Nan this does evoke much emotion and contemplation too. Thanks for that.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"and we madly skip over lines they tell us not to cross." Aren't lines meant to be crossed? lol Love the images and how they "skip" down the page!  Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Nan, it feels like you speak of things I know. This is fantastic poetry indeed! I will KEEP it! Love, Margherita  "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is fantastic, Nan... such vivid images!! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"until the next storm rises and we madly skip over lines they tell us not to cross" I love this  |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
You mirror many lives with this. Such wide recognition attests to your writing skill. Enjoyed! |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Hi Pilgrim, I enjoyed this.....not sure I understand it, but enjoyed it. It could be that the latest storm has been danced around at all will return to normal until the next storm. Quote: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I choke on fuming sulfur, you dine on tea and frost ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Curious. Sounds like you are in a position to suffer for those skipping the lines and your dance partner rather takes it all in stride, with his/her tea and frost. I see, yes like children they skip over those lines. I wonder if sometimes those lines are the real walls and imaginary walls are what's needed to keep out the storms and off of lines. Oh well, no matter really, either way. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Raw emotion makes for such grand poetry. Really good reading, Pilgrimage~ |
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