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WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

0 posted 2009-01-05 01:03 PM

What was it I saw in those eyes?
That look as she walked past me,
With a song in her voice as she said hello,
Oh, such a beautiful Lady is she,

From the first time I saw her smile,
Though I knew it could never be,
I wanted to know more about her,
How could I make her love me?

Should I tell her of these feelings?
Let the spirits of my heart reveal,
Do I take that big step, and let her know,
Exactly how I feel?

Oh, such a beautiful Lady,
Inspiring poems I wanted to say,
I have but one chance, and I must win her over,
Could my rhymes entice her to stay?

She listened to my words then whispered,
In my ear just so I could hear,
You make me believe I’ve known you forever,
And that I have nothing to fear,

So take me away and love me,
Yes you are the one of my dreams,
I can feel the poetry in you soul,
Fly with me on gossamer wings.

The answer is always NO, Until the question is asked.

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

1 posted 2009-01-05 07:38 PM

Awww This is very beautiful,
Very romantic and the flow was outstanding
Well penned i enjoyed it thank you

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2009-01-07 04:04 PM

Splendid. It reads so smoothly and flows really well. Great job on this one, WT.

A

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

3 posted 2009-01-07 04:09 PM

Thanks Annie and Alison, I appreciate your kind words and you taking time to read my work.

Hope you beautiful ladies have a wonderful new year.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2009-01-07 04:15 PM

WT,

This is splendid writing. It flows very smoothly and I was captured by the story that you told. Wonderful.

Thank you.
A

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2009-01-07 06:33 PM

Enjoyed...James

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2009-01-07 06:47 PM

It looks like I stuttered or something, doesn't it. I didn't mean to post basically the same message twice. I was losing a battle with my computer and I didn't realize that I had acutally won.

This poem is worth every comment that it gets though.

A

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2009-01-07 10:25 PM

William~
What a tale of love in rhyme~

Thanks for sharing it with us~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2009-01-08 01:27 AM

Very romantic render of warm love thoughts....I enjoyed it very much.

Eric

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

9 posted 2009-01-08 10:02 AM

Alison,  Nice to know I have that effect on you.  Love ya,

James,  thanks for stopping by, appreciated,

Marge, nice to see you seeing me.  thanks,

Eric, Thanks for the read,
Hope to have the time to read you all this week.
Hope you all have the best of the New Year.
With gratitude,  W.Tracey B.

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