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Open Poetry #44

Only To Die

pontyjim
Junior Member

since 2009-03-06

Posts 40
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2009-03-07 09:12 PM

Scribbled red ambulance

Wails death across these midnight tenement streets.

Bald streetlight illuminating

This concrete kingdom,

this unshaven madhouse.

More victims of the shuddering roadside blues,

They left bleak basements to fly unguarded

into this sordid, sorry sunrise,

Only to die

Only to die.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2009-03-08 02:48 PM

Profoud, Jim. Stark reality one can feel.
Ida

impact
Junior Member

since 2009-03-07

Posts 27

2 posted 2009-03-08 04:11 PM

this is really great, the first line "Scribbled red ambulance" drew me in immediately. This really describes how I feel when I hear ambulances driving down the street, realizing what's really happening inside of them...

good stuff man.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2009-03-08 04:29 PM

Intense write!

Puts the reader right there.

Eric

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2009-03-08 04:53 PM

Very impressive. Those "howling" ambulances never leave one indifferent.

Love,
Margherita

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