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Sun Streaked |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
The coast is still save for the sweeping sands and quiet beauty. A whisper in the wind washes away salt water tears. Winters' chill sends a thrill blowing softly in my ear. Stirring memories of young love a place in the sun from another time seemingly endless on the horizon. Basking in the sun streaked, August heat bending our ways in the tall grass caught in the golden sunset of years and summer times on vacation. Breezing through our youth. Pale pinks and yellow sunbursts, ice cold lemonade and coppertone babies highlight the endless summers. Melting a young girls heart sweetened in the shade. Rafting on waves that don't break like promises kept word for word catches my breath in the winter wind and breathes. [This message has been edited by Noel (03-06-2009 11:46 PM).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my! What a beautiful West Coast scene you set. Living on the West Coast, I absolutely loved this. Welcome to Passions and I will search for more of your work in the future. Check your email for a nice welcome from the folks at Passions. Carpe' Diem, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noel - nice picture of the west coast... BC |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
Hello Mysteria, Thanks so much for the warm welcome and your thoughtful card. Thank you for your nice reply, Bill Charles. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Noel, I am a coastal baby and really enjoyed this poem. I hope to read lots more of your work. Welcome to PiP ... it is great to have you among us. Alison |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Welcome to Pip, dear Noel. This is very lovely, like inhaling fresh air. Love, Margherita |
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pontyjim Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 40Ontario, Canada |
Wow. I have a mythic fascination with the west coast (I live in frozen Canada) and this poem has just sent that into freakin' overdrive. Very very good poem. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
..."word for word catches my breath"... ~ Most assuredly!!! Loved it! Hi, there, Noel! Welcome to the blue pages! You word-painted your first 'page', very well and in a variety of vivid colours!  Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions  enjoyed |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I live in So. Cal. Love this. It IS the west coast. Welcome to PIP. Ida |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
Wow!!! Thanks to each of you for welcoming me with open arms. I very much appreciate your kind words in reply. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Absolutely beautiful! What a wonderful introduction to your work... I look forward to reading more! *S* Welcome to Passions!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to these blue pages. This makes me homesick for the Pacific. Born in California, I spent most of my life on or near the coast, especially the Channel Islands area north of Malibu, and then along the coast of Oregon. Life circumstances have me in northeast PA, but my heart belongs to the west coast. Sift some sand through your fingertips and toes for me, please. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful images in this piece. They're clear life breath images and one can hear, see and smell them. Very nicely done! Welcome to Passions. Eric |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
well...first...welcome to PiP...now, lovely write...filled with glorious images that make one yearn for the sea...again--loved the last stanza with these words standing out... "catches my breath in the winter wind and breathes" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, I do like where your sun travels, Noel! Thank you for commenting on my poem, as well. Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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Raindance Member
since 2009-02-07
Posts 120West Coast |
Ok, that's it. I'm headed for the beach to breathe in that chilly wind and maybe even a few snowflakes. I love the visuals and the time travel through memories in your poem; very nice. |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
Thank you so much everybody! It's really great to be here. |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Hi Noel, Welcome to PIP, this is very good and your metaphor is much appreciated. I liked this very much. One thought: In the first line of the second stanza, In my read it should either be "Winter's chill....", or "Winters that chill, send a thrill". At least that is how I'm reading this. turtle |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
Thank you gentlemen. Punctuation is not my forte..especially that darn apostrophe.... Call me dense! Is that how you spell dense? |
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