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Be Longing
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Be Longing |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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Be Longing Sometimes I wondered Why I stared out the window And what was out there That was not here [This message has been edited by Juju (03-07-2009 02:08 AM).] |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Juju, Everyone, in their own special way--belongs. There's no getting away from that. Love Bobby |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
It is human nature to search for the unknown. That is until you get older, and you don't even look anymore out windows for a change.  Loved this. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Juju - you have a way with words and write them together very well. Always much meaning to your writings... BC |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Juju, Get rid of "in" in the last line. John . |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Thank you John -Juju |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
very poetic thoughts Juju, thanks for sharing, this is delightful and so poetic and thoughtful too. yann |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
sweet and short write  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Short poem with a lot to say.Enjoyed. Ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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gdcod2player Member
since 2008-07-26
Posts 117 |
looking for someone new or someone old is something we all do Even if you are looking for them they sometimes don't come around so you have to leave and look for them just my 2 cents |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hmmm... I'm wondering why you deferred to John on an edit? Not sure if I disagree with him or not, I'm just curious...and if there is some private mentorship, I do defer my question, understanding that sort of relationship. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Hahahaha!!!!!!! That was really funny. He was right. If I disagree I wont make changes. This I do irregardless of the person. If you look on my box I encourage critiques. In this case John was right. -Juju |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think you were simply longing for your best friend, your muse. Within comes from out there because if there was no out there then there would be KNOW you. Interesting name you have. Did it come from the name of a candy you couldn't pronounce when you were a kid? You know, real cute kid sounding with a little lisp. Don't mind me, I'm crazier than he*ll! Take care and don't pull the blind Eric |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
well, if it's up for discussion, with utmost respect, I'd like to know why you think he was right? (not intending offense, I'm trying to learn too...) |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Of course. The word in its place changed the direction of the poem and effected the meaning at that location. Or made the poem blurry. Juju -Juju |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Hehehe no I like to play with words... allot. -Juju |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
quote: I know, lovie. I wouldn't have asked it hadn't. but okay...he said to change it and you did. I was just wondering... it's lovely, either way. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Do you really mean "effected the meaning of the poem"? Eric |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Im watching the meaning of the meaning change too, E. (I learned a long time ago to save the screen...)  Nicely done J. *eg* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well, I don't blame you otherwise the flies will get in. ......... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
or out. bwahahahahaha  (sorry Juju, me and Eric kinda...well, we're naughty!  )do proceed.  |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Oops! I would have changed it if anyone would have should me. -Juju |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
OH..... hahahahaha that's funny. Juju -Juju |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you for your sense of humor love. We both thank you. (don't we, Eric?) ...serenity exits, prodding eric with her pitchfork...  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
He he you're good people JubeJube OUCH! Did you feel that! Love that beautiful full moon this morning. Making everyone think about Marge. Some damn things are just so damn sad. Eric |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
It is sad she is gone. -Juju |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I don't think she's gone...  (she'd love this sorta thing) love to you all... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
she can't be gone she is Marge in the moon |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
back to your poem, juju...I loved the message and young or old many of us wonder the same (and I agree that the "in" was not needed.) Nice writing~~ M |
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