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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Salt grass and evergreens sing a chorus sweet While seagull prints vanish from the shore tugged away into the deep |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I like this! Good imagery. It's my pleasure to have inspired a write about the ocean and shoreline! Thanks for reading ocean opus.  |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
this is a very vivid piece of a poem. i wish there was more to it. While I could very clearly see the imagery you described, I felt a little disappointed that there wasn't more meat on the bone, ya know? You have talent, but you could have used that talent to lengthen the poem a little maybe. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Not quite senryu; not quite tanka, but filled with images... and I love the idea of prints being tugged away... Good to read you again, m'friend.  |
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