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Thought is the word
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Thought is the word |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia 
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When thought becomes the breath of heard When pen and page become as one When then eyes do watch each word The writer’s work is done |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
I like this poem, although I feel it's too short. I know that there is no rule for how long a poem must be, I just feel you could have picked at the poem and got it to open up even more. The tightness of your lines and rhymes is near perfect. Great job in that regard. This might sound mean, but is that really your picture or is it a Just For Men ad? |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
tao power thank you for your reply, I know the poem is short, but the lines carried all I wanted to say tonight, I may continue on it in the near future and you can read again ok, and yes, that is my picture for the rest I really don't know what you mean, take care and again thank you for the reply. Rick |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I would like to have a book of you  very nice poem here! Enjoyed the brevity |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Unusual brevity for you, dear Rick, but I think it is just perfect the way it is. It says it all. Love, Margherita |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I'd say that's a great succinct sumation of a writer's perspective. Eric |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Dixie, oneday I will send you one my friend, thank you for the visit and reply, good to see you here, hope things are going better for you. Dear Margherita, for me it is very brief, but the words did say what I wanted them to and to write more would have undone the meaning, good to see you here my friend, thank you for your reply. Hi Eric, appreciate you reply my friend, very good to see you here replying. To you all my friends, again thank you. Sincerely Rick |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yeppers! When all those things come into play ~ mission accomplished!  Warm hug 'n a smile across the miles, Linda  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Rick old cobber, I must be honest that is not one of your best by a long shot. When I think of all the wonderful poems that I've heard you recite at our monthly meetings makes me wonder. all the best. |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
Straight from the heart of a poet! Wonderful!! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Rick - always enjoy reading your writings, another one here... BC |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hi James, thanks for your comment, always good to see you here. Dear Linda, great to see you here, thanks for the visit my friend, appreciated. Hi Lindsay, amazing how maybe my shortest poem will give the most replies, has to be something in that, it is my thoughts shared, thanks for your thoughts my friend, might have to add some lines to make most people happy. Good on ya Noel, lovely to get your reply, thank you my friend. Hi Bill good to see you here again my friend, thank you for your comment, heart felt. To you all my friends, again thank you. Rick |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Rick, I am an avid follower of your poetry and you have yet to let me down. I like this - the message is strong. And you know I love your picture (grins). A |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
...and in this case, done way too soon...guess it lives up to the old saying of "leave them wanting more"...and as such, am wanting...more |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Alison, thanks for your reply my friend, always love seeing you here, have a great day. Hi steavenr, I should have more time soon and hope to offer more soon, thanks for your reply my friend, much appreciated. To you both my friends, thanks for the visit, enjoyed. Rick |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Dear Rick... I read, I smiled, I applauded you...  thank you RDB xxBe kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hello Roniece, thank you so much my friend for your reply, always good to have you visit, take care we'll chat soon. Rick |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I may not practice succinctness or brevity, but I can appreciate them! *S* I like this very much! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear suthern, it is not my normal practice to write something so short, but in a way now I am happy that I did, it brought a lot of reactions from friends. Thank you for your reply my friend, as always very much appreciated. Rick |
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