Open Poetry #44 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
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diminished tapped scales bordering a jagged edge of auraline on the hemline of madness just above the knee double stitched knee highs are that so catholic and purist angst a charcoal sceptor swings on past Holy Holy Holy [helpless] me... Ave Ave Ave me Maria in stained glass. |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
wow. speechless. I love this poem! Your succinct treatment was truly outstanding. You delivered more power and poetry in those few lines than most can fit in 15 stanzas. I liked the title too. Heathenism juxtaposed with Catholicism. Just like the poem. Very clever, very good, I'm jealous lol. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
ah ... the raw power of 'minimalism' so effectively delivered! MUCH applause!! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Brava!!! "...on the hemline of madness..." My Lady, I bow. "My hand yearns to feel the flowing balance of the axe, to spin within the circle luminescent in the dance of death;" From "Always Odin's Child" /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=82&topic=000753 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hmmmmm....provocative. Check your email! ![]() |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
ok...apparently I do not have the life experience requisite for a full understanding of this...always love your layered meanings, btw, and it took me some time to get past the title alone (my bad), but I have...now, I must confess...I have no idea what auraline is...help, please? hate to ask, but I am dying to see what you've said here in its deepest levels...I am beginning to feel like that kid with a new toy that I've just unwrapped for my birthday, only to find out it takes batteries (and they were not included) and all the stores are closed, so I can't even play with it...maybe I'll just go re-read it and see if I experience an epiphany... ![]() |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well now. I oughtta be ashamed of myself. I just made up auraline. It's a drawn on halo. ![]() When I wrote this, I had written "aura line" and then I took out the space, because... it just looks and sounds like a pretty word all together. ![]() I just make up words sometimes, folks. Not intented to drive ya'll crazy. I'm naughty though. Somebody should spank me. ![]() |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
brava! brava! As a lover of made-up words, I salute you...(however, I shall leave the spankings to another) ![]() |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Grinning here at your auraline line, how karenity it is. I'm keeping this one for ME. ![]() |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Loved this one lady. :muwha: |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
SPANK! SPANK! SPANK! Hey, you stop liking that right now! You're baaaaaaaaaad. Off with your head! Eric |
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