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A Crumpled Notebook
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A Crumpled Notebook |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia 
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 A Crumpled Notebook So much was written Upon those torn pages Tears had been shed Through various stages In meant to be poems Pages I have torn apart On tear stained paper I poured a broken heart The feeling of despair Not even words explain Mixing tears and ink Pages release the pain A crumpled notebook On pages I would write Piece by piece I tore Shedding tears tonight Hope ©2009 |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
we pour our hearts out into those notebooks...looking for a place for the ache to go.  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
beautiful and enjoyable to read, i like the precision of the words and the efficiency of the stanzas... thanks yann |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now, I too had one of these. You sure wrote the pain of these kind of pages well. |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
i agree with islander. this poem is efficient. No getting bogged down in convoluted psuedo-poetics here. You stripped this poem to the bone (which I imagine is probably how you were feeling at the time), but it still packs a punch. This poem is a dancing skeleton. I mean that in the best possible way. |
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pandababy New Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 5 |
Brilliant, I'm sure we can all relate to the fury of trying to write poetry through pain :-( |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
HopeS - I've found over the years our best writings seem to come from hurt and painful experiences. This one is well written... BC |
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Blood.Wolf Member
since 2009-02-09
Posts 54GA, USA |
pain hurts way too much... I've been through approximately five of those so far. On to my seventh? Well, every time I finish one, I burn it to symbolize the freeing of spirits and the destruction of despair! Yay. “For the strength of the Pack is the Wolf, and the strength of the Wolf is the Pack." ~Rudyard Kipling |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dry your tears my dear and look around at all the blessings that you have. By far, they will outdo your problems ten-fold. Now give me a smile. Love Lindsay |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I know the tears that flow to words I know these pages of hurts But every one letter every one page A stronger day on this stage Sad, but so well written The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah my friend... maybe it's time to start another notebook! I understand |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It does help to write out the pain, doesn't it? Good to read you again, Hope. Hugs, Ethel Ethels Love Poetry My SpiritIsUp Poetry Shelf Powered by CGISpy.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I admire those who can write of the pains of life ... I for one have trouble doing so and usually just shut down for awhile. I can fully understand however the words you brought to us with this and the pain also. Wishing for you a notebook filled with sunshine and happiness. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hope You have this way of expressing such deep thoughts so concisely. Your economy of words with such meaning is a delight. Eric |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
hope, what a lovely way to describe poets... your a breath of fresh air... Lee J. |
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