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0 posted 1999-09-04 12:27 PM

Can someone tell me if I did this right, please?

I love you more, than you could ever know
Know you better than anyone at all
All the guys mean nothing compared to you
You are the one I love forever and longer
Longer than eternity I will be your friend
Friend, and a confidant, your partner in life
Life is special and perfect with you here
Here in my life you always need to stay
Stay this way forever and do not change
Change how you love me or the way you care
Care for me in every way, like you always do
Do make me happy, but do not make me sad
Sad that you left me, I never hope to be
Be the angel that guards me from all danger
Danger from all evil, you keep me safe,
Safe and protected, you care for me sweetly
Sweetly perfect as you always will be
Be mine for ever and always keep me happy
Happy I found someone as special as you.

People who throw kisses are hopelessly lazy.
-Bob Hope

© Copyright 1999 Susan Acacio - All Rights Reserved
since 1999-09-03
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1 posted 1999-09-04 12:51 PM

I liked your poem Personally, I don't think there is a wrong way to write poetry, they are your feelings, and I think you should be able to express them any way you want to. It was cool, keep up the good work

Heather C.

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