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Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 42

0 posted 1999-08-04 08:50 PM

The Core

You speak softly, but listen not,
You're a drug, a narcotic of the worst form,
Infinite pleasure bringing infinite pain,
Who are you to entice me with suffering?

You scream and silence all but yourself,
You blind me to the truth,
Lies laced with fact,
Who are you to dictate reality?

Your singing fills the air,
You hypnotize with melody,
The careless leading the ignorant,
Who are you to run my life?

You stop speaking when I listen most,
You're a coward without loyalty,
A coup at the precise moment,
Who are you to lead and abandon?

A drug, a lie, a careless being, a traitor?
My closest ally?
I've found you, but cannot uproot you.
I'm helpless.

Lead on, friend.

I just want you opinion. Who or What do you think is being referred to in this poem?

© Copyright 1999 JohnDoe82 - All Rights Reserved
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121
1 posted 1999-08-04 10:52 PM

I really didn't get your poem, but as i was reading it i could feel the power of your thought in it! i just don't like big words, cause i usually don't get them! that's just me, im not intellegent! but i think you should post it in the Open Poetry, older people get big words!


Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 43
Brooklyn, NY, USA
2 posted 1999-08-05 12:02 PM

It sounded good but i had the same problem as misty i dont understand long words either. I have no clue who you are talking to...1 guess...God?

Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 26
Brownwood, Texas, USA
3 posted 1999-08-06 04:17 PM

I'm probably very far from the real meaning but i think it's about people (or you) letting narcotics run their life. Or probably it's about how drugs intice people to want more then they can handle and they become addicted........I really don't i'm just guessing. Well anyways it was a well thought out poem and your a very good poet keep up the good work.



since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
4 posted 1999-08-06 04:25 PM

Im very lost in ur poem
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