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Are you gonna break my heart too?
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Are you gonna break my heart too? |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
Are you the 1 for me? Will "we" ever be? I don't know much about you. And I don't know if what you say is true. U just cam into my life, Without any say. Now as I sit here by the bay, I ask myself, "Are you gonna break my heart too?" Are you like all the others? Are you the same as them? What should I do? Are you gonna break my heart too? Is what we have between us 4 real? Is what I feel, wut you feel? Now I sit here helpless. Waitin 4 u to make the next move. Is there something u wanna prove? I wish I only knew. What should I do. Are u gonna break my heart too? |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oh, how so very true..the games of the heart are difficult ones, I know. Excellent job! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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Slim Shady Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 32Phoenix, AZ, USA |
I LOVE the last two paragraphs. I think you should find some way to make the poem just like them. Work on the first part of it. GOOD JOB! ------------------ "That's Rock Bottom When this life makes you mad enough to kill... That's Rock Bottom When you want something bad enough you'll steal... That's Rock Bottom When you feel you have had it up to here Cause you mad enough to scream but you sad enough to tear" Words by the Slim Shady |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
thanx  both of u.P.S. I like ur poems Slim Shady |
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