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My First Haiku
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My First Haiku |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania 
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This is my first serious haiku so please tell me what you think and if the form is right along with the meter. Thanks. Ocean sounds so soothing To my solitary ears Please take me away. Much farther away To a place I've never been So peaceful and calm. A place of freedom Full of hapiness and joy I want to be there. Where the birds fly free And the animals roam too Where I want to be. |
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Misty Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121USA |
This is a really great haiku! keep up the writing! ------------------ ©Misty |
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dude Junior Member
since 1999-08-05
Posts 16wilkes-barre,pa.,luzeren |
yo it was good keep wrighting |
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Psycodillica Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 28Lapeer,Mi,USA |
Good Job  Keep it coming Psycodillica -------------- "Don't cry because it's over but, smile because it happened." |
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