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Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania

0 posted 1999-08-01 07:46 PM


This is my first serious haiku so please tell
me what you think and if the form is right along with the meter. Thanks.

Ocean sounds so soothing
To my solitary ears
Please take me away.

Much farther away
To a place I've never been
So peaceful and calm.

A place of freedom
Full of hapiness and joy
I want to be there.

Where the birds fly free
And the animals roam too
Where I want to be.

© Copyright 1999 Susan Acacio - All Rights Reserved
Misty
Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121
USA
1 posted 1999-08-01 09:29 PM


This is a really great haiku!
keep up the writing!



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©Misty

dude
Junior Member
since 1999-08-05
Posts 16
wilkes-barre,pa.,luzeren
2 posted 1999-08-05 03:36 AM


yo it was good keep wrighting
Psycodillica
Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 28
Lapeer,Mi,USA
3 posted 1999-08-05 09:53 PM


Good Job
Keep it coming
Psycodillica
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