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Mike1sacks
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

0 posted 1999-07-29 08:16 AM

sound of your voice
the way it makes me feel
the thought of a tender kiss
closing with a seal
Every single night i dream of you
every day in class the same
but then again i truthfully i doubt
u even know my name
to u i am a stranger
someone u even knew
to me you are a beauty
someone my heart consumed
I just wish 1 day I'd have a chance
i know i never will
to take your hand hold it tight
and swallow all those pills
as i sit here and i cry
knowing i have no chance
just 1 date with you
to take you to a dance
i know i dot like dancing
i know you lug i too
but truthfully I'll do anything 4 u
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Mike1sacks
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

1 posted 1999-07-29 03:43 PM

Post please

Sweet T
Member

since 1999-06-14

Posts 64
mesa, arizona maricopa

2 posted 1999-07-29 06:29 PM

Hello again. I have a question, What do you mean swallow all those pills? To me that sounds a little dramamtic. A stranger is only a stranger if you don't introduce yourself. That is why I do not allow anyone to be a stranger. We may end up just someone to meet, but we can't let fate do all the work, We have to step up to the bat and take a swing once in awhile. SMILES!

Mike1sacks
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

3 posted 1999-07-30 02:01 AM

Mike1sacks
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

4 posted 1999-07-31 04:37 PM

this is hideous

Black Rain
Member

since 1999-07-19

Posts 60
California, USA

5 posted 1999-07-31 11:33 PM

I like it, it is very good, but kinda depressing for me at least. It reminded me of some problems i'm having right now.
black rain

Olga
Member

since 1999-07-26

Posts 152
Brooklyn, NY, USA

6 posted 1999-07-31 11:52 PM

aww that was soo sweet.
I think wut u should do is say smth and dont be shy, girld hate that

Mike1sacks
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

7 posted 1999-08-01 04:20 AM

olgfa y arent u online??

Mike1sacks
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

8 posted 1999-08-06 04:22 PM

1

Starr_Scott
Junior Member

since 1999-08-06

Posts 26
Brownwood, Texas, USA

9 posted 1999-08-06 04:44 PM

I'm kinda in the same boat as Sweet T
Waht do you mean with that line?????
Great poem though
Starr

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doritos
Junior Member

since 1999-07-31

Posts 21

10 posted 1999-08-07 05:49 AM

interesting poem

Squirly
New Member

since 1999-08-06

Posts 3
Beaverton, Oregon, USA

11 posted 1999-08-07 07:42 AM

I think this poem is real good and your're a very good writer. You really know how to express a lot of emotion in your poems.

Mike1sacks
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

12 posted 1999-08-11 04:53 AM

1

Starr_Scott
Junior Member

since 1999-08-06

Posts 26
Brownwood, Texas, USA

13 posted 1999-08-14 04:21 PM

Why don't you respond with something like "Thanks for the great comments" instead of the number 1 or the word SEX! YOU COULD REALLY WORK ON THAT.
~~~STARR~~~

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