Teen Poetry #1 |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
sound of your voice the way it makes me feel the thought of a tender kiss closing with a seal Every single night i dream of you every day in class the same but then again i truthfully i doubt u even know my name to u i am a stranger someone u even knew to me you are a beauty someone my heart consumed I just wish 1 day I'd have a chance i know i never will to take your hand hold it tight and swallow all those pills as i sit here and i cry knowing i have no chance just 1 date with you to take you to a dance i know i dot like dancing i know you lug i too but truthfully I'll do anything 4 u ------------------ [email protected] ------------------ [email protected] |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
Post please |
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Sweet T Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 64mesa, arizona maricopa |
Hello again. I have a question, What do you mean swallow all those pills? To me that sounds a little dramamtic. A stranger is only a stranger if you don't introduce yourself. That is why I do not allow anyone to be a stranger. We may end up just someone to meet, but we can't let fate do all the work, We have to step up to the bat and take a swing once in awhile. SMILES! |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
this is hideous |
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Black Rain Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 60California, USA |
I like it, it is very good, but kinda depressing for me at least. It reminded me of some problems i'm having right now. black rain |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
aww that was soo sweet. I think wut u should do is say smth and dont be shy, girld hate that |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
olgfa y arent u online?? |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
1 |
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Starr_Scott Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 26Brownwood, Texas, USA |
I'm kinda in the same boat as Sweet T Waht do you mean with that line????? Great poem though Starr ------------------ |
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doritos Junior Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 21 |
interesting poem |
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Squirly New Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 3Beaverton, Oregon, USA |
I think this poem is real good and your're a very good writer. You really know how to express a lot of emotion in your poems. |
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Mike1sacks Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103Bklyn ny,usa |
1 |
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Starr_Scott Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 26Brownwood, Texas, USA |
Why don't you respond with something like "Thanks for the great comments" instead of the number 1 or the word SEX! YOU COULD REALLY WORK ON THAT. ~~~STARR~~~ |
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