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since 1999-07-28
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Kingston Springs,Tn.,U.S.

0 posted 1999-07-29 01:37 AM

As the key falls deeper into the well
I hear it hit the water
The door it holds is locked away
hidden behind dreams and mysteries
Dreams that were once the sparkle of my eyes
Eyes that belong to a distant star
that shines in the never-ending sky
The answers all have questions within themselves
The fire of eternalness has disappeared
and beyond the door lies a love
with only flames at fates feet
To give all there is to give
would not bring the two together
only paitence and time will tell if the door will ever open
to reveal the treasures that await within

Kiya Bowermaster

[This message has been edited by Kiya (edited 07-29-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Kiya - All Rights Reserved
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
1 posted 1999-07-29 02:25 AM

Wonderful poem Kiya. I received your E-mail, and found this, as you asked. As for naming it, use something you like, something that fits well. The one thing that camed to mind with me is simply "Locked". Perhaps some others can give some other suggestions for you. A wonderful job!!

*Krista Knutson*

"I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks

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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

2 posted 1999-07-29 06:31 AM

I agree with Alwye. Something simple would be best. Might I suggest, "Fate"?

Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669
Michigan, US
3 posted 1999-07-29 06:39 AM

Sounds like you got a couple of good suggestions for a title, Kiya (and for a darn good poem, too). But there's one more thing you need - a valid email address!

I think you had a typo when you registered, and every time someone replies to your posts I get the notification instead of you. Please check your "Profile" and fix the email address. Thanks!

Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46
New York, N.Y. USA
4 posted 1999-07-30 02:46 AM

That was a beautiful poem.
Keep up the good work!

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