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Teen Poetry #1

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pun83
Junior Member

since 1999-07-07

Posts 26
FALMOUTH ,MA. U.S.A

0 posted 1999-07-07 09:21 AM

there is a person i know
his name is joe
he has nothing to show
he wanted more
but became very poor
so his wife kicked him out the door
he had to get a job
with a guy named bob
he wanted a raise
and a lot of praise
but instead he got the boot
he lost his will
and decided to kill
and now joe is nomore

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 1999-07-07 08:52 PM

Pretty good, until the last couple of lines.... Can you rewrite them?

SuGaH2432
New Member

since 1999-07-07

Posts 2
E.Falmouth mass usa

2 posted 1999-07-08 08:45 AM

nice poem pun!!!!!its very.......nice!

roxy8365
Junior Member

since 1999-07-07

Posts 27
e.falmouth MA usa

3 posted 1999-07-08 08:50 AM

i love big punisher

roxy8365
Junior Member

since 1999-07-07

Posts 27
e.falmouth MA usa

4 posted 1999-07-08 08:57 AM

sorry, pun. tom wrote that. but i still luv ya!!

habeebpetersen@hotmail
Junior Member

since 1999-07-07

Posts 28
falmouth MA usa

5 posted 1999-07-08 09:00 AM

tat was a ioud poen yo ciserly thom

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