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The Hate Within
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The Hate Within |
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invertigo18 Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 53Prairieville, LA., USA |
Hate, hate your friends Pretend to love them Pretend you care. Pretend, when there's nothing there. Thorn in my side Will never subside The hate within For all the sin A coward A hero A liar A zero. What will come of this? When will it end? Wading in your piss Fake and pretend. The ocean of pain will consume you in vain. The ocean of pain will make you insane. Your way is wrong. My way is strong. For I am a hero. And you're nothing but a zero. Remember this And the hate within. Hate yourself 'Cause you can't pretend. Anymore ------------------ Luke Cakalic |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This poem shows the quality in your work...have you ever posted in the Open Forum? I think the folks in there would appreciate the depth you have in your words....I can't believe no one has replied to your work...that's why I think you'd get better response in the other forum. Try it, there are some truly exquisite poets in there, I know they will like your stuff. I'd love to get inside your head...how long have you been writing? ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I mustive missed this one!! Absolutely wonderful...I do agree with poetFemmeFatale, you should post in the open forum..it seems more people there would appreciate your talent!  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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