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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2005-03-10 12:10 PM

Backwards tripping,
the title
for a day of disappointments
when waiting is filled with
empty memories
and spaces are void of breath.

The cold seeping into pores
not caring about all those "so, whats"
planning the wrongs
because doing all the rights
made no difference.

To toss and throw out
all those words needed
to be expelled,
for once to not be proper
and shout it out, even if only
to an empty house
four walls of painful feelings
soon to be dismissed
the holding onto
a waste.

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2005-03-10 03:57 PM

when waiting is filled with
empty memories
and spaces are void of breath.

I like this very much... and your title is perfect for the tone of vulnerability!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2005-03-11 10:07 PM

feel the desolate feeling within the walls here,well done

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

3 posted 2005-03-11 10:13 PM

and doing wrongs when the right is wrong--seems to tell a lot about human nature! Enjoyed. You write your heart!

a very befitting title!

miscee

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-12-2005 03:54 PM).]

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2005-03-11 10:15 PM

M. you picked a perfect title for a poem
that exposes so much of an inner person.
Well done.

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

5 posted 2005-03-12 10:26 PM

Your attire is most becoming off!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2005-03-13 08:49 AM

To suthern...we probably have more in common than we each know~~

To Michele, that's the feeling for sure~

To miscee, well it really means that  everything in life I have tried to do  right and it hasn't seemed to work out, so maybe it is time to step out of the box and make my mark!


To Barry, I thank you  from the most inner part of me.

To Local Rebel, you gave me the smile I needed before I say goodbye~~

~My Thanks to All~
Maureen

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