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Aya
Junior Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 42
New Zealand

0 posted 2003-07-04 05:21 PM


One year ago, I died
One year ago, I grieved
One year ago, I made you grieve
One year ago, I lied
One year ago, My life changed
One year ago, I was foolish
One year ago, I was alone
One year ago, I pretended
Many of you don't know what happened one year ago.
Today my life is completely different because of the events that happened one year ago.
For those that remember, I'm sorry.
I never really meant it to happen, one year ago.
There is no need to forgive...
and maybe a year from now
I will look back and be glad
that I told the truth
unlike what I did
one year ago...

© Copyright 2003 Alicia Martin - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2003-07-04 08:54 PM


Very interesting write, even though it was bit repetitive.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Tim
Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794

2 posted 2003-07-05 10:51 AM


we all have our mistakes to deal with, and sometimes repetition is a big part of life, we just have to move forward. Nice job.
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2003-07-06 09:22 PM


Mistakes are not something we choose to make, it's part of human nature, like it or lump it.  
I think the repetitive scheme suits your poem well.  


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