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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2003-06-28 03:04 AM



you once told me you loved me
you once told me i was your own.
ive belived the sweet words
you said. but now im standing
here alone.

you onced cuddled my head dearingly
in your great big loving arms.
you once told me you defend me
but now all you do is harm.

where is this man of mine
the one that was here holding
me. where is this man of mine
that said he would never leave me.

now the rain falls down my face
as the wind brushes my hands.
your love for me has had an
ending. just like the beach
has it's never ending sand.

Even though my heart is breaking
with what has become. i will
never stop loving you,For you
will always be my first love.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


© Copyright 2003 Julie O'Neill - All Rights Reserved
QjQ
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since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756
U.S.A.
1 posted 2003-06-28 03:15 AM


very good your bringing back the good times to weigh against the bad times,,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ


timothysangel1973
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2 posted 2003-06-28 03:38 AM


Wonderful write Foxy!

You keep throwin' em' out here, we'll keep reading!

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla
3 posted 2003-06-28 04:30 AM


Thanks alot. I'm glad you guy's liked them

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


JilGirl
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since 2003-05-24
Posts 364
Washington
4 posted 2003-06-28 05:01 AM


The comparison is clear and precise.
First love is precious, but as you've
written, can be painful. There's
wisdom gained and strength arising
from this type of experience.

Healing is taking place!
Great write!

Blessings!
Shirl

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2003-06-28 05:18 AM


Curious how many first loves work out to a satisfactory conclusion...James
Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla
6 posted 2003-07-06 04:23 PM


I'm sure not to many. That is sadly the way life is. but sometimes there are the lucky ones that get to be with there first love forever.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23
Posts 324
california
7 posted 2003-07-07 02:12 AM


on either side of the relationship, good or bad,
you never forget your 1st love.
Sadly I can relate to this poem in the position of the leaving boyfriend.
Good stuff.
Joe

"The worst vice is advice" (Al Pacino, devil's advocate)

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
8 posted 2003-07-08 03:49 AM


you did that to a girl..shame shame..


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