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Your Shore-Reflecting Eyes

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snowpants
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0 posted 05-29-2003 02:41 AM       View Profile for snowpants   Email snowpants   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit snowpants's Home Page   View IP for snowpants

I知 thinking of running to the ocean;
Any chance I could get you to come with me?
I知 really wishing this sound I知 hearing
Was your voice...
So make it be--
Explain to me what you notice
When the undercurrents challenge the surface.

I知 wondering how your eyes look near the sea;
Would you trust me when I speak of such splendor?
I知 completely gripped by the notion
Of your face composed of the shore...
So indulge me--
Tell me what you know
About the way the light reflects under the waves.

I知 dying to know what you池e thinking;
Would you fill me in on all entailed therein?
I知 suddenly captured by the hint
Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil...
So follow me--
I値l have to show you what I致e learned
From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides.

-kh 12/02

just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday...

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passing shadows
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1 posted 05-29-2003 02:45 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

awesome! love the ending! speaks so loudly, but so softly powerful...I would follow
Janet Marie
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2 posted 05-29-2003 07:48 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I知 wondering how your eyes look near the sea;
Would you trust me when I speak of such splendor?
I知 completely gripped by the notion
Of your face composed of the shore...

So indulge me--
Tell me what you know
About the way the light reflects under the waves.

I知 dying to know what you池e thinking;
Would you fill me in on all entailed therein?
I知 suddenly captured by the hint
Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil...
So follow me--
I値l have to show you what I致e learned
From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides.


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Ahhhh...I do so love the things the blue inspires in your pen ...
these analogies and personifications of the ocean are pure poetry...
Splendor? oh yes...you write the blue waved reverie so splendidly.

hmmm....now ya got me wondering what color our eyes will be by Lake Shore Drive
(me thinks mine will still be moth brown..but they will be smiling)

Another very cool write poetess K ...
keep them coming...ya know this moth's ocean thirst is never quenched.
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3 posted 05-29-2003 07:56 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

So follow me--
I値l have to show you what I致e learned
From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides


great ending lines..and a very good write.. now if you can move the ocean a bit closer to KS so us poor midwesterners don't have to run so far..lol

Janet Marie
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4 posted 05-29-2003 08:45 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

well, will ya look at what I found.
Some body with a really good eye for photography took this...





HINT HINT  
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5 posted 05-29-2003 11:10 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

and lets not forget my mothy faves....






(so I am biased... sue me )
Tim
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6 posted 05-29-2003 11:14 PM       View Profile for Tim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tim

A pleasure to read, enjoyed.
snowpants
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ps:  thanks for your reply...glad you enjoyed it...

J:  thanks J...I do appreciate your compliments...I'm thinkin' my head's not gonna fit through the door...SHADDUP...Lake Shore Drive?  now yer teasin' and makin' me more impatient than I already was     and about that ocean thirst....

Cap Ron:  trust me, if there was a way to move the ocean here, I WOULD HAVE DONE IT A LONG TIME AGO...thanks for the read...glad you enjoyed!

J (again and again):  now I'm going to have to pay you for advertising fees...thanks a LOT...cute  

Tim:  thank you so much...glad you liked it...

sp  

just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday...

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...


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Kris~
Again..it's great to see you around these parts again.
This is an absolutely gorgeous write...I love it.
Waiting for more...
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Duncan
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9 posted 05-31-2003 11:20 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

'I知 suddenly captured by the hint
Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil...
So follow me--
I値l have to show you what I致e learned
From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides.'

Very cool...JM illustrated for you!     Some really great lines in this SP.  And yes, the ocean...
icebox
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10 posted 05-31-2003 11:40 PM       View Profile for icebox   Email icebox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for icebox

"I知 suddenly captured by the hint
Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil..."

Yes, that's the one.

The wind is coming in now with the rain and I can smell the ocean.

Thank you for sharing these images.
Alwye
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11 posted 06-01-2003 01:24 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

This is incredibly well written.  I especially loved the ending.  Wonderful poetry!  

*Krista Knutson*

"If we have no peace, it is because we've forgotten that we belong to each other." ~Mother Teresa

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wonderful write, loved the ending
Dee
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13 posted 11-17-2003 06:43 AM       View Profile for Dee   Email Dee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dee

sp, there is only one thing more beautiful than the ocean and that is the ocean reflected in a lover's eyes. This is surely a beauty to keep.

Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are.        Clearwater

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