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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I found you When I ripped the bones From my body and cracked them open. The words you had spoken Etched in the marrow of me. Indelibly, scribed memories Done in calligraphy from ages past Seemed undecipherable at first Then with a bit of blood revealed The truth, You are always inside me. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Dumbfounded here! with mouth gaping open. You sure can write! Oh my..... Well, if that just doesn't capture a soulmate situation, in a most dramatic, deepest, incredibly shocking way. Never heard it put quite like that. I don't know what is stronger than passion, but you touched it with this. To take bones and marrow and blood and turn it into this is awesome, to say the least. Love at it's finest. Wow! Really enjoyed this. Warmest regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Laney Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 85Illinois |
Cpat--this is by far one of my favorites from you. You are such a talented poet, and I am Christmas Tree green with envy! What a remarkable poem. The passion is "bleeding" off the page! --Alana  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Capitain ~ I just noticed that you have ascended! Glory be to you in the highest! tehe Congratulations on your 5000 th POST Now regarding your poem, I recommend you have a bone marrow transplant. I could refer you to one of my doctor friends and he'll give you a good deal! warm hugs, EA |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
i'm in awe. loved. lots of love, gemma xxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
DANG!! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
pat... dumfounded explains a lot of people's reaction to my writing..they are amazed I can still post after sharing so much drivel.. ( chuckling) thank you for the compliment. laney... you are too kind... but thank you EA... you are a smart **s ( chuckling) only thing I ascended to was another level of ineptitude at writing.. as for the Dr friends and the transplant... I'll let you know... have to find a donor first... ( laughing) gemjop... thank you for the nice words... they are appreciated greatly. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (12-18-2002 06:14 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nancy... DANG??? such strong language from you!!! Now..what are we going to do with you for talking that way??? Hmmmmm???? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OHMYGOSH!! There goes my monitor again!  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(laughing) You and your monitor... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I can't think of anything to say...I hate using that word "wow". My eyes are so tired today it's all I can do to keep them open and read a few poems.  M |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
go sleep and say nothing.... hugs..... |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
OoO, deep intuition! O' to be delivered from the realm of the rational into pure song... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
GOlDsparklESS: just a flash of insight... thank you |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
OUCH!--a stinger--you may be ripped apart but your words are quite together!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
it's good. but towards the end, it pauses, then continues again. that totally breaks the invisible flow of the poem. nice metaphors too, calligraphy. it seeps into you. cool. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron Sometimes when you look under the skin of things...you find something very sweet. If you did, I envy you. The wording in this hit the target that touches. |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
oh yeah, stupid title by the way. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Captain, I could donate some of my own bone marrow for the transplant. But there may be too much sugar in it for your liking! You might even end up with diabetes!---or even worse! You could end up writing sappy sweet nothings like I do! tehe Warm hugs, EA |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I think we know the same women. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sandpiper: thank you... Christian: not sure I agree with you about the flow..it is meant to slow down and was done in part for an effect. As for the title being Stupid... I fall back on Forest Gump... Stupid is as stupid does... martie... you my friend are always looking under the skn of things to see what else is being said. Thank you for taking the time.. EA... ( chuckling) you are too cute... thanks for the offer! Duncan... perhaps we have the same types of memories of different women...or maybe we are just flawed as humans and feel the world much the same... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I always knew you were a master but now apparently you have ascended. Congratulations, lovie. You do understand so much. And without getting all mushy? I want to thank you for YOUR inspiration and constant encouragement--I think this poem is amazing--even with the stupid title!  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(laughing) Ser..you are too much... always a card... thanks for dropping in..and for even thinking I might know anything... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - h'mmmm, now this I like. Thought provoking write... BC |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm still trying to figure out how best to say thanks for this... perhaps I shall study my marrow a little more... |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
um.[1] Kielo [1]- "um." 1.a sound of great awe. 2.denotes amazement. 3.used to compensate for lack of words. 4.indicates deep deliberation. I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The ultimate rent, burning down the house and poking the ashes proves the cause was not just the match but the striker. Rise Phoenix rise. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
...and forever. Will be interesting to see what awaits on the other side. Cor |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Well, Capt. Ron........ (here I am again...amazed and not knowing any other word to say) (Me....speechless?) "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-19-2002 12:20 AM).] |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Excellent, Sir ! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Ron, this is poignant and excellent, sweet friend, I know this feeling of solidifying too and love is not perfect so can bleed yet the life-force is always inside you and love is what makes the aorta produce that blood of promise! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is marvelous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can't begin to tell you how much I can relate to this |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
My bones are smiling at this. Your marrow is way too cool. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ron, This is an excellent write... Regards to you, Sudhir P.S. and I wrote this while I read yours... ----------- I found you and I felt as if you were the rarest liquor and I found myself addicted forever wanting more Yes, you can call me a drunk. The truth is: thoughts of you flow within my blood and you reside in me leaving me forever intoxicated ------------------ |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
I know this feeling. It's "always" there. Sunkissed. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ron, Harrowing intensity that I can understand. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Some people leave a mark that lasts a lifetime, whether we like it or not they're presence remains a part of us forever and a day. |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
The passion and soul in this piece is overflowing. The feeling whisks away at the mind. Letting it only see pieces and fragments. This poem was amazing. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can surely relate. Had to say it again so you get it. [This message has been edited by passing shadows (12-23-2002 01:41 AM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You know the thought-paths this led me on. *S* But in case I forgot to say... this is one of the best works I've read lately... and I'd sell my right leg to be so much part of another. *S* |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Self-hurt AND self-worth at once. Wow... |
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