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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2002-11-02 10:02 PM


'Twas around about November in the year 2002
that the "Doc" was shootin' of his mouth, as he was prone to do.
He was fixin' fer a challenge, jest a spoilin' fer a fight,
what he said shore wasn't pretty, but, gol dang, thet boy could write!

He done started in one evenin', 'bout ol' "Deer" was pokin' fun.
Near as I can tell "Deer" missed it, or jest turned around and run,
cuz there weren't no back talk comin', not one witty reparte'
so ol' Doc he jest kept writin' sayin' "C'mon, make my day!"

Next he took to messin' with the one they all call Lhn Jhn Ag,
he done said some stuff was pretty rough ( ol' Doc he liked to brag),
"Ah kin shoot the pecker off an ant from 15 miles away!"
Much like "Deer" there wasn't no reply, at least not to this day.

Now, ol' Doc was feelin' cocky, he went gunnin' fer ol' Toe,
an' said some thangs would curl yer hair ( were there some left, yanno)
ol' Toe he musta missed 'em jest as plain as " if yuh please"
the town-folk stared laughin' I done heard their tee-hee-hees.

From here the story varies, all depending who yuh ask,
there's some that say the three of them done took ol' Doc to task,
but, me I'm of the notion they was all a-feared to show,
them "Tumble-weeds of Passions" had been dealt a fearsome blow!

© Copyright 2002 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-11-02 10:05 PM


LMAO I like it

Cold hands means a warm heart

Sunshine
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2 posted 2002-11-03 08:11 AM


Well let's pull this out of the woodshed and back to the top where it can get some attention...
garysgirl
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3 posted 2002-11-03 08:49 AM


Mr. Moose, I just don't think those other
"lunatics" have seen it yet. If they had, I'm
certain they couldn't resist leaving you
a "message" for this one and from your
"Minor Indiscretions" one, too..  HeeHee !!


~~With  Love  And  Hugs  To  All~~
                  Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-03-2002 08:51 AM).]

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-11-03 03:56 PM


Looks like there's a new sheriff in town!

Yer good medicine, doc!

Earth Angel
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5 posted 2002-11-03 05:42 PM


Doc, you 'operate' with finesse and innuendo--but with the occasional shot right between the eyes! lol

You have a wonderfully acerbic wit!

Glad Sunshine shone her light on this one and brought it back into view!

EA

Madame Chipmunk
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6 posted 2002-11-03 05:48 PM


I sure hope they see this one, Doc...
It ought to be fun to see their replies...
You did a first rate job, Dr.Sherriff
~ hugs from the fastest chipmunk in the west

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 2002-11-03 07:56 PM


loner,
Thanks, ya better watch that though, once they fall off it's real tough to get 'em put back on,
Doc
Sunshine,
OUT OF THE WOODSHED! OH NOOO! WHAT WILL I DO?
Thanks dear, just havin' some fun with the ol' boys.
Doc
garysgirl,
Thanks, I've been having a lot of fun with this even if they haven't replied yet. Where it all will lead to is anybodys' guess.
Doc
serenity,
Ah got's mah badge outta a gol-dang gumball machine, but I'm ah writin' tough an' rhymin' mean. Thanks.
Doc
EA,
Thanks,(I think)."Acerbic", now I done heard that one before, wait, don't tell me, that's what happens when ya stick a cheap pen in yore back pocket an' it leaks ink all over your butt, right?
Doc
Madame C.
Well I'm glad you're still following along and offering a word of encouragement here and there. Being that your the fastest chipmunk in the west, I may need a little backup, consider yourself deputized.
Doc

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8 posted 2002-11-04 09:29 PM


Old gunfighters clearly understand
Scenarios like these.
Some brash young 'slinger comes to town
To bring them to their knees.
They think that they can build a rep
By taking on the best
But there's no rep that's valid
When yore bones are laid to rest.

You swat 'em down or spank 'em or
Ignore them if you can
And leave them with the fantasy
That they are quite a man
But if they still don't take the hint
Ya have to shoot 'em down
So they will rue the day they brought
Their six-gun mouth to town.

So now I see another one
To show up on the scene.
I'll try to take him gently
Since I don't like being mean.
I've heard he's pretty quick, though,
So I won't take foolish chances.
Ok, stranger, make yore move
And welcome to the dances!!!

Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2002-11-05 07:12 AM


"but, me I'm of the notion they was all a-feared to show,
them "Tumble-weeds of Passions" had been dealt a fearsome blow!"

ROFL ... wonderful Dr. Moose!  I love the wild, wild west style you've captured this in. A wonderful piece to lasoo their attention for sure!  Thanks for the grins!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2002-11-05 08:04 AM


Dr Moose sat on a wall
Scratched an itch and had a big fall
Fell on dear spilling his beer
And the results are still not clear.
Good write enjoyed.

Dr.Moose1
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11 posted 2002-11-05 10:41 PM


Balladeer,
"Welcome to the dances?"Now that's a stretch by far.
Maybe in a different world they might know who you are.
Because I think so highly of your mastery of words,
I will not point out that your ending rhyme's
absurd.

Come and taste the necter of a god with two more feet.
Never ever will the the likes of me say that you're sweet.
As apple pumpkin peaches pie,it's " who's not ready holler "I".
And then de-cry ,"I have been beat" For "Doc" will not admit defeat.

suthern
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12 posted 2002-11-06 09:42 AM


but, gol dang, thet boy could write!

Thet he can. LOL But he'll never shoot our terrible trio down... thank goodness! LOL

This is great, Doc... and I love Bal's response... dance on! LOL

Balladeer
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13 posted 2002-11-06 11:17 AM


LOL! My ending rhyme may be absurd
But grammar will not sink so low
To use the phrase "I have been beat"
That's no English that I know!

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